Poetry Critiques : What are we here for?

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  1. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What are we here for?
    Has the years gone by dried up the love we once felt
    Has the blistening sun dried up the river I made with my tears
    Or have we both been lost through the tunnel of hopelessness
    I can't figure this out
    Love like triganometry you must break it down to get the correct answer
    Math wasn't my best subject
    But I do know this
    1-1=0
    Zero
    My hero
    You once came to save me when I was down
    Down
    I have return
    I yearn
    For a man to hold me in countless possibilities
    Fullfill my capabilities
    Enrich my youthful delight
    Erruption in lust
    All these things above
    Now it seems that our love took a shove to
    Convenience
    Convenience
    Is all we now can give
    This is no way to live
    I need you to tell me there is no way that we are going to live
    like this
    I miss
    You
    Don't you?
    We sleep apart
    I question who has you at heart
    Is it those women who call you through the night?
    Is it those women who throw you a bone
    Leaving me alone
    To fend for myself
    Wealth
    Couldn't patch this thing together
    Ask Usher
    Papers
    He was ready to sign
    Sign
    Seal
    Delivered
    My lips quiver
    Knees buried into my chest
    Head rest
    As I ponder this ?uestion
    "What are we here for?"


    Lavette112/Nevar112
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    a question asked by millions yet da answer lay within only there rest your answer

    this was very touching made me think and ask what are we here for !
    this piece was well written sis
     
  3. Antwan

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    This piece paints a great mental picture. Though the sentimental question of often asked, it is not often answered quite so well. Thank you.
     
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    yep thanks for the love given to me on this piece!
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    Now thats expressive. Real expressive. Write on, Poet
     
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