Black Poetry : Wet

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by renee31127, Jan 25, 2004.

  1. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You dipped into my ocean of love
    Drank from it's flowing streems
    All I can do is feel you
    Touch you
    As you and I become us
    We are one
    These waves of lust crash one after another
    My tide seem to never subside
    Water crashing, splashing
    Dripping wet, soaked from head to toe
    Slippin, sliding
    Taking me on this ride of love with you
    Trying to subdue these feelings
    Having no choice but to let things flow
    Beats of Rock The Boat playing in my head
    As you do just that
    My ship has sailed
    On a voyage to ecstasy
    And I never want to go back to dry land
     
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    Hey if this happened to me, I'd want to stay at sea too. These images were so vivid, just flowing with that water, wow, very nicely done.
     
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    now this was sweet
    posed well.....
    i feel ya on dis indeed
    tight drop
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    lovin da waves of the sea here
    tyte drop
     
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    Sister this piece was...

    shall I say....

    "Fluuuuuuuuuuuuuidly.....Wonderful"
    as I just caught the passionate wave and
    rode it until the end...

    Beautiful flow!
     
  6. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all so much
    and angelicsage :bowdown:
     
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    Those last three lines my beautiful sista...jus :jawdrop: said it alllll :)
    This was so simple and yet SO [email protected]!!! lol do the thang my sista
     
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    Triniti you're words mean so much, thank you. Cause you know you're one of the baddest chicks :)