Black Poetry : Weeping Water

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  1. soulful2006

    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You see the dark brown
    Almost dirty pools of water that you
    Would not recognize
    If even I did take the time to explain to you
    what they truly are
    They have been walked through several times but never really
    ever seen
    These pools so cold and dark
    in the midst of such warmth and grace
    Now not seen for all
    The things that are yet unseen
    about this place
    These pools
    Full of weeping waters
    They never seem to dry
    Even when its almost one hundred
    Degrees outside
    These beautiful brown muddy pools
    So deep but seem so shallow
    How can one would never know how
    Deep they go
    These dirty brown pools are
    My eyes and no matter how I try
    To Hide I can not keep the truth
    Of my pain away from the masses
    I know now that the tides are swelling and
    The pain is growing deeper
    And this is just the beginning of my Weeping Waters
     
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    deeply felt here ......as da water rise..
     
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    I liked how you used the metaphor of pools to describe weeping eyes. Well written poet.
     
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    Bringing this descriptively blue piece back for some love.
     
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    WOW...I just hit my jaw (to the desk).
    This was beautiful. Really.....

    moham
     
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    beautiful ode to the New Orleans

    nice work poet
     
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    Beautiful words and deeply felt!
     
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    THank you all for the love just trying to find myself poetically again. the me you're used to hearing from got lost somewhere in the shuffle I'm just trying to get her back before its too late.
     
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    In this life we often feel lost, but somehow we come back even stronger. Keep on writing.
     
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    thank you for the support
     
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