Black Poetry : wednesday 1/23/02

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Giovanni, Jan 23, 2002.

  1. Giovanni

    Giovanni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is an observation exercise for the MOCHA HUT workshop, that AnitaJ and I are apart of.. I HAD TO do this, because it was last weeks homework assignment.. forgive me, if it's not good. Just want'd to post this up.. it's real short..


    I’m inside my '85 Cressida, shield'd from the rain/
    soakin’ through asphalt, like water through rottin’ wood.

    I watch leaf-less trees, with their branches stretch'd out
    like crucifix'd bodies against a grey sky, where clouds are contraceptives;
    a condom wrapp'd around the sun, who's rays are wasted ejaculations.

    at the corner of the school yard, I sit like a sniper
    waitin’/ watchin' for my sister in-between the cross hairs,

    wonderin' what's takin' her so long.

    today is also my lil' sister's birthday "happy b-day 'Licia".. she's 16yrs. old ("OH NO!!!")
     
  2. Anita J

    Anita J Active Member MEMBER

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    hmmm...

    free write...right? i felt this...creatively describin' the trees and rays of the sun there...i wouldn't have come up with that but thas why you're Giovanni, na'mean...word. yo, it's cool. i still need to work on mine...procrastinator i be...but atleast i can say i excel at that cuz if procrastination was a degree, mayn, i'd have a PhD...no doubt. :) j/k. keep flowing like you do brahvah.
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gi

    I may have to agree with sistah AnitaJ here.... your writings have been awesome thus far, and I'm sure you've got more rabbits to pull outta your hat! Creative writing is you bruh!

    :D

    Thanks for these pieces of Giovanni that you sprinkle across the page!


    N2
     
  4. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes, yes, yes...:eek:, i'm lovin' it. very creative styled. yo talent is real, mos def. scribe on, i'm watchin'.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!

    from above i watch u flow
    ya vibe of free style is awesom
    keep bangin' dem keys......:D
     
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