Quiet Poetry Lounge : Weak

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SensualReality, Apr 1, 2004.

  1. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Weak in the knees I get when you touch my skin
    Weak is my body when you make me happy and I'm floating
    When I see you it makes me wish
    When I'm lonely it's you I miss
    Like without food I die without you I cry and cry and cry
    When you leave,but never decieve it's hard to say bye
    When we get off the phone all that gets me to hangup is the tone
    Is D.T.(dial tone)our transmittor,because you don't call no more
    He's my friend now when you always go out,weak?
    Yes,I am from this poor treatment I get.
    Once you were my moon,stars,and all.
    I felt like Cinderella at her ball forgeting all loving and hoping
    Someday her prince would say,"will you marry me?"
    He did,he did,but that's just a fairy tale.
    Once like Heaven now hell
    You were like satan and I fell
    I fell so deep
    I was weak.
     
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    not weak just romanticly enterwined wit sweet passion
    this was smoothly laid out
     
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    Thank You

    thank you for your insight :thanks:
     
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    most welcome indeed from one poet to another
    peace
     
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