Quiet Poetry Lounge : Weak Moments

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by PoeticAlize, Apr 7, 2008.

  1. PoeticAlize

    PoeticAlize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    at weak moments i disown the label that was given to me
    the label that was placed on my finger so that i mite not burn
    but so that i could endour the concept of hell on earth
    not all the time

    just at weak moments
    when frustration turns to anger turns to regret turns to sadness
    at weak moments
    when togetherness turns to selfishness
    at weak moments
    when simple transgressions create ridiculous agression
    and any attempt for progression is halted

    i don't wanna walk at a pace not my own
    sometimes i wanna stop
    stop all the facades
    stop all the madness
    stop the belief that my happiness is dependent on someone not me

    then there are times when i wanna run away
    run so far ahead that i passby tomorrow
    leaving an unreal future behind me

    i'm so tire of not being me
    that i sleep away talkless hours
    sleepaway bull**** conversations
    about a past i yearn for
    a present that i detest
    a future i can't see

    at weak moments
    i turn this relationship into slavery
    touching into abuse
    and this love into indifference
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    in da wake of moments when one at it's weakest point love strikes sometime
    we face these times at the weak moments
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    During weak moments, we just want to stop the world and get off. So difficult to carry on when there's a weight upon us, yet at those times often even more is expected of us. I felt the pain in this well written piece.
     
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    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I have seen such moments, weak moments. I try to learn lessons from the weak moments, to create strong moments. Nice piece, thank you for sharing
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Back to the top....
     
  6. brianna

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    Nice write. If a relationship is meant to last it is the enduring of weak moments that give a relationship strength. Knowing that you and your mate have survived the weakness no matter how hard gives you a renewed faith in the strength of what you have. Sometimes after many years it is those weak moments that become enduring memories of two people who shared one life.
     
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    BallOfConfusion Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really loved this especially when you wrote "there are times when i wanna run away;run so far ahead that i passby tomorrow." I feel you so much on that.
     
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