Black Poetry : Water

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Realguyjeff, Dec 7, 2002.

  1. Realguyjeff

    Realguyjeff Active Member MEMBER

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    W
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    t e r


    I want to be like water

    hindered by no F o R m
    Defining my own dimensions

    f l e X I b l e
    and
    fluid


    and constrained by no boundries


    Let my spirit

    F
    L
    O
    W

    tranquilized by this fluid epiphany
    and thankful for my state during
    retrospection of times

    When I was

    ICE cold and

    Stiff
    I want to be warm and fluid
    I want to be…..

    Pure like water…….

    I want to be

    Real like water
     
  2. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    great work

    love the way you wrote it
     
  3. aqueenpassing

    aqueenpassing Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "NICE"

    Very creative and unique, good flow of words, I enjoyed the read
    Be blessed
    Queen:toast:
     
  4. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome!!

    welcome to the playground of destee's place
    welcome to da vibe & lovin embrace
    welcome to da house of grace
    flow on poet wit da scribe u placed
    nice flow dis piece was grand look to read more of u !
    welcome :D
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
  5. Ladysoul

    Ladysoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice piece. love the way it was written
     
  6. Bishop

    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome...This is a tight flow here...waiting to see more from you.
     
  7. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi and welcome...

    I love this peace...

    there is something smooth/sexual/mesmerising about the flow..of water....and you covered this nicely..

    K
     
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