Quiet Poetry Lounge : Water and salt......

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Auroraflower, Aug 8, 2006.

  1. Auroraflower

    Auroraflower Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (i wrote this i think 4 weeks ago.or a mond it was strong.)


    Last night hazy bubble with youre face in it...
    a sad look comming out of youre eyes that express a missing feeling to a vieuwless night horizon...
    searching.....
    passed by in my thoughts..while i was standing behind a little window in the house of my mother in the dark high on my toos above the watterpuddle that was left of the cold shower i took before....
    My neck streched out to get sight from wich house the old soul music playing a song called "brandy "' was comming from that seduced me to this spot..
    Rusty and suprrised i was standing there because of the feeling that came out of my depth.....

    not knowing it was still there....

    a tear that hunted down south and multiplied with the water that was still on my body.....
    and reunited in the waterpuddle......

    A long time i stood there listening to the songs.....

    finaly ....



    i admitted to myself....
    finaly i let go of me........

    and the feeling....




















    i miss you.....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt , i enjoyed this piece
     
  3. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey Auroraflower...
    I can't see the words to your piece, is there a way you can darken it up?
    thanks poet
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello Aurora:
    I really enjoyed your piece. I strained my
    eyes just so I could read it.

    oh how I can relate.


    Much luv to u
     
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