Black Poetry : Watching You

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Euphoria, Feb 12, 2003.

  1. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I watch your face in the candlelight,
    I remember the first time you said you loved me,
    I think back to all the perfect love we made,
    Us, forever, was all that I could see

    As I look at the smile that touches your lips,
    I remember all the laughter and fun we shared,
    All the walks in the park, days at the beach,
    The romantic gestures that showed you cared,

    As I stare at your hands, my heart aches,
    For I remember the softness of your touch,
    They way you'd embrace my whole body and
    Whisper that you love me so much,

    As I see you laying there, seemingly asleep,
    I remember that you wont be coming home,
    I long to climb in the casket beside you,
    Because I miss you so much and I never felt so alone.


    *Emma*
    12/2/03
     
  2. LibertyLady

    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is so beautifull...................
     
  3. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oooooo...for all the sorrows tomorrow will bring...I THANK YOU for this.:( peace.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very heart felt
     
  5. Sista Steele

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    I didn't expect that ending! So sweet and so sad. Nice work Euphoria.
     
  6. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for sharing such a beautiful bittersweet piece.


    souldeep!
    Coco
    :heart:
     
  7. poeticdelight

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    oh my goodness

    now this was deep :eek:

    very heartfelt

    pd
     
  8. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Libertylaida - Thank you for reading and I'm really happy you liked it.

    Baller - Thanks, that means a lot coming from a talented poet such as yaself

    Rich - as always I'm honoured you graced my page

    Sista Steele - Thank you for appreciating. I didn't expect that ending either when I wrote it.

    Coco - I appreciate all your comments, thank you :)

    pd - thanks for the love

    :)

    *Emma*
     
  9. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    emma.


    this peace touches... deep.

    lil sister... this was both beautiful
    & bittersweet. thank you for sharing.

    (i been missin' you, chile!! :D )

    itsallLove,
    elayne.
     
  10. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks so much elayne. You know how much I be appreciatin' your words.
    I'm so glad to be back. Missed u 2.

    *Emma*
     
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