Black Poetry : Was It Enough?

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  1. POETIC RAPTURE

    POETIC RAPTURE Active Member MEMBER

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    I'm new here so any feedback will be welcomed.

    Was It Enough?

    Your rage, left unbound
    knocks me to the ground.
    Your fists git my face
    reminding me of my place.
    I kicked, screamed, and cried
    I even almost died
    But was it enough?

    You say that you love me,
    But you act like my enemy
    Adding insult to injury
    by verbally abusing me
    I cursed, yelled, and cried
    I lost all my pride
    But was it enough?

    You told me I was ugly, fat, and dumb
    hoping to change what I would become
    I'd heard these lies for so long
    I believed you couldn't possibly be wrong
    I ranted, raved, and cried
    But was it enough?

    I look more like your ex everyday
    the one you drove away.
    I walk, talk, and act lik another
    I'm sorry I remind you of my mother
    I struggled, shouted, and cried
    My hurt I denied
    But was it enough?

    You beat me cause you couldn't beat her
    Why can't we go back to the way we were
    The one thing I wanted most in the world
    was to once again be Daddy's Little Girl
    I cried, cried, and cried
    I even attempted suicide
    But was it enough?
     
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    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, those are some strong words. Its really good that you can get those kind of emotions out into poetry. I'm really feelin this.
     
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    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Writing heals so much. To be able to write this down and create this image. My prayers are with your healing.
     
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    all i can do is shake my head...it hurt so much to read this. i hope your abusive situation has been resolved, if not there is help out there. please, please, please seek help. your flow was beautiful, but i must admit, it really brought tears to my eyes
     
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    POETIC RAPTURE Active Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for all the love. Don't worry everything is ok now. I've gotten over my past but sometimes it still hurts.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow! This was so deep and heart felt, and beautifully posed. I'm glad things are better for you now. And welcome to destee! :wave:
     
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