Black Poetry : was it a dream...

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  1. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awakened…
    By the tell-tell sounds
    Of muffled sobbings
    Her body shaking
    As she fought to control
    The quaking of her heart

    “Baby…
    What’s wrong?
    Please, don’t cry.”

    As my mind rolled and tumbled
    Through the darkness of the abyss,
    She began…

    “What do you think I am?”
    she asked
    between torturous breaths
    now openly crying
    “Do you think I’m a sperm bank
    some place to deposit your seed
    whenever you please
    while toying with the rest of me
    at your leisure
    playing my heart,
    effortlessly
    is that what you think of me?
    Tell me…”

    As I pulled myself along
    Darkened corridors
    Of a smoke-filled maze
    {leading out of sleep}
    fighting desperately
    to get back to reality,
    I just stared at her

    “Oh…
    you ain’t got nothing to say
    now, huh?”

    This…I heard
    As reality slowly seeped
    Through the crevices of
    Sleep deprivation

    As I began to focus
    I thought:

    “what have I done
    To make her feel this way
    Was I cold
    Have I been callous
    Was it something I said
    Or, failed to say
    This day
    Yesterday
    Or, somewhere in a past life
    When times were gray
    And men could only pretend
    To care

    As I stared at her
    Consciously aware
    {for the first time}
    I smiled
    Before I could formulate
    My thoughts into words
    I felt before I heard
    A thunderous clap
    As I was slapped
    Into her reality
    And my nightmare

    Neither was fair

    And both hurt

    Without answering
    I stood
    Dressed
    And walked out the door
    Searching…seeking…my reality.
     
  2. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked what you wrote and she really jumped the gun...she made me mad! So I guess you made your point...cause I"m feeling it...definitely.
     
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    It was understood.

    I question why you walked out the door without understanding...but then again...Its not your baggage. It was deeply felt...understood. But in the end...nobody's question got answered. A helluvaway to go don't you think.

    shaneak

    p.s. It was good though...you got me thinking?
     
  4. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANKS FOR THE READ...

    redlady...but lose the anger, it's not about that. life offer us choices at time. she made a choice. i made a choice. life continues on. always smiling:)

    shaneak...sometimes you realize, usually at inopportune moments, that things aren't right. sometimes that realization comes with such clarity that you know those things will never be right and to continue would be a waste of time. again, life is like that. SOMETIMES.

    thanks for the love, y'all.

    peace.
     
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    well atleast you saw it...I suppose. You didn't understand it..but you saw it...And got the hellupoutathere!!! LOL

    If it works.

    shaneak
     
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    baller,

    i feel you on this one. i feel like this was pulled from depths of my history. walking out that door with unanswered questions was hard but releasing the baggage left with me was harder. that was many moons ago and i am much better for it.thanks for the reflection and the tightness in which you penned it
     
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    Jyntlbreez Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A deep and rivoting piece here...I like that you chose to stepped off the scene, before things escalated further.

    Sometimes, resolutions may be found, when you walk away and return to later address them, however, That may not necessarily, always be an option!

    Stats: 30% of Male spouses are battered with in the household
    Yu say HUH?? Yes men are physically ,verbally and emotionally abused also! Great piece Baller!
    Jyntl
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** happens...

    dnommo...we all go through it sometimes. that's life. so, we deal with it and move on.

    jyntl...yeal...we get abused too. sensitive heart and all, you know we got feelings, right?:)

    thanks for the read.

    peace
     
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    man baller....

    this hit me hard in the gut....
    it echoed words i said long ago
    to the one i loved
    and was just too wrapped up in my own misery
    to realize
    that he did love me 2....
    but i was gone
    b4 either us could formulate the words


    thank you


    *drowning in memories*
     
  10. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You painted such a vivid picture here poet
    So vivid that I could feel the sting on my own cheek

    Hope she didn't hurt my Boo Hoo too much ;)

    *B-stings*
     
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