Black Poetry : walking home

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by gempis, Sep 12, 2003.

  1. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the brutha is walking down the strees
    screaming, "I don't have a home,
    and it's great!"
    nine people ask me for spare change
    one is a white woman in clean clothes
    that looks like she goin out
    there is the man talking to himself -
    seems like a great conversation
    but it's not funny like the two woman
    walking side by side, each
    talking on a cell phone
    that drag queen is so well-dressed
    but the druggie girl is really a mess
    pierced faces
    snippets of conversations
    why do his eyes look so dead
    why does she seem so happy
    bodies every shape and size
    people frontin every kinda vibe
    anatomy and physiology taught me
    about the mind's ability
    to dull almost all sensatino
    if we felt every piece of our
    clothing
    sensed all that is in our
    atmosphere
    we would go crazy
    would be mad
    similarly
    I don't feel any of
    what I saw
    after I get home
    not cold just
    self-protection
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...the imagery in this is amazing...i love this...
     
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    yes what a picture you paint...
    i like this wow
     
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    boy, that seems like such a long walk home...but i know it wasn't. the imagery is sooo good in this piece. much love.
     
  5. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lovely, mzblk and true, thanks much for the love. Right back atcha. :heart: :)
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    scribe on my poet of the week :)
    oh and uhhh...
    thas quite a walk home LoL :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaa!
    u took me down a lane wit dis one
    i really like how dis played out
    to perfection.
     
  8. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks so much, triniti and $$RICH$$ !!

    :)
     
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    the realism of this piece brings back memories of a city
    I use to live in....wow, yeah the walk home can be quite
    interesting....I liked this journey you took me on!
     
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    so deep
    powerful
    the vision of your expression
    show indeed in this flow
    well felted
    very nice
    Peace
     
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