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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Alkebulan, Aug 4, 2005.

  1. Alkebulan

    Alkebulan Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sister remby was kind enuf 2 ask me about my poetry recently. this is for you sister remby.


    who comes barefoot 2 greet the sun
    when morning breaks with the sky's first hue
    while daybreak creatures thru the forest run
    and weeping willows bath n the dew

    who sleeps instead when the dawn 1st speaks
    n tongues of nature like the wren's 1st twill,
    or an unseen hand thrusts mountainous peaks
    missing scenes which charge the poets' quill

    but who has leisure to frolic out of doors
    to watch sunrise, amidst the daily grind
    or tickle turtles dancing on nearby shores
    neglecting work that's left behind

    there's purpose to fulfill, work to be done
    before the joy of strolling in the sun


    :love:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome scribe poet...............this was well written
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm sure Remby will enjoy this brotha. This was so peaceful, makes one feel at one with nature. Great piece.
     
  4. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    this was a beautiful piece...
    a lovely poem
    I loved it..and what it says..
    Purpose...(i wrote a poem with that title)...I think your piece says it better so simple in its complexity...so rich..
    thank you for giving it to sister remby ...to us
     
  5. Alkebulan

    Alkebulan Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u

    $rich$, ur words of encouragement r appreciated :glasses:

    sister watzinaname, glad u found it peaceful - that wuz a major intent of the piece. thanks.

    sister deepy, 1st, major props 4 keepin "afrocentric notes" flowing 4 so long n my absence; 2nd, i'm so glad u found something 2 like about this piece. u kno, this poem actually has a hidden messege, but i may have hidden it a little too well ( :help: ). anyway, i would really like to read ur poem - purpose - f u don't mind. could u please post the link here 4 where it is posted? & f it's not posted, could u please post it? i do like to :book: ur posts.

    again, thanks to all. :dance: :luvv:
     
  6. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    if i knew how to post the link i would...best i can say is go to my profile and look under post i started and write in the word purpose it should come up...
    read yours again...lovely
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Really nice and peaceful Alkebulan, great poem!
     
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    Awesome poem. Really beautiful. :star: :star: :star: :star: :star:
     
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    Wow...i really enjoyed this poem...it was descriptive and calming...i love that


    keep the flow goin
     
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    HI brotha Alkebulan
    it's been so long since i've enjoy your poem
    I'm feeling the same joy you're
    feeling from the Sun, and the light touch
    of the morning dew.
    Wonderful :)
    there's purpose to fulfill, work to be done
    before the joy of strolling in the sun

    Peace