Black Poetry : wake up!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by nfinite, Jun 3, 2004.

  1. nfinite

    nfinite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :flamet: Impeccable honesty shame guilt blame

    Forbidden love betrayal destruction time

    Cries peace family joys pain bloodshed

    Bewildered life tears Struggle


    I am looked upon as society’s enemy
    But soon society will end in me
    Handed down the notation of an American dream
    But the aspiration seems to wilt
    All upon the foundation
    Of which this country was built
    Impeccable guilt
    But the struggle undermined
    Using time and fabrication
    to mislead a starving nation
    And look into the faces of my people
    And say you heed
    In the faces of my people
    You quoted we are dogs
    Of a different breed
    *******, blacks, coloreds, Negroes
    *******, tramps, wenches, hoes
    faggots, punks, Bull daggers, dikes,
    All these things you have trained a people
    To dislike
    Although the fight for equality
    Will soon be song across the regions
    But until then
    here’s my pledge of allegiance
    I pledge defiance
    To the flag of the divided states of America
    And to the republic
    For which it failed
    Many nations
    Turned from God and divisible
    with Liberty and JUSTICE for some
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes indeed well felt scribe
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brilliant Work...WOW
    I love the impact of this stanza...
    but most of all...I was stirred in the way
    you crafted the tactics of brainwashing
    and hypocracy upon which this country
    is truly founded...and still operates today...

    again...Brilliant Work!
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No melting pot here, you posed a definite wake up call, keep these flows coming.
     
  5. one_love

    one_love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love the metaphors. Very deep and thoughtful poem.

    One_Love
     
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