Black Haiku : Waiting

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Kaboom, Sep 7, 2002.

  1. Kaboom

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    Snow in Alaska
    Falling on desolate plains
    Matches her silence
     
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    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kaboom, this flow slams with a huge boom, its really deep I enjoyed the way you likened her silence to cold, icy snow-don't get covered up too deep now!!!

    lo'
     
  3. Nia Maishani

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    Yes Ma'am and Yes Sir

    Brilliantly crafted analogy and poem.
     
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    Thank you Nia Maishani, although I'm not sure there are plains in Alaska. The image is good, but it may not be at all accurate. Those kinds of things drive me crazy. Thanks for feeling me.
     
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    lo'
    I actually wasn't in that much trouble when this came to me. When the snow is too deep, I can't even find a pen!
    Kaboom
     
  6. Nia Maishani

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    ahh, Haiku in its purest form...

    thank you for this.... (and I believe as a Poet, you have poetic license to portray Alaska however your artistic eye sees fit...I'll see it, too)

    alyce
     
  8. Kaboom

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    Alyce, thank you. You never know when you put this stuff out there, and I mean bring it into creation, if anyone can hear you. Thank you.
     
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