Poetry Critiques : Waiting

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Versatile, Dec 26, 2005.

  1. Versatile

    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can't wait To be with you
    My mind wonders
    At times i stay thinking
    So Anxious
    At just the simplicity
    Of touching your skin
    Running my
    Fingers down your abs
    Caressing your lips with mine
    **** baby
    I'm already in heaven
    Using my five senses
    I wonder about your scent
    What it's like to smell you
    Even when you sweat from a
    Recent basketball game
    What it would be like to
    Hear your voice
    When your only 2 feet away from me
    Engaging in conversation so deep
    That pierces my heart and touch my soul
    With our words of expression
    The fact is,
    I...I wanna see you
    Because curiousity is killing this cat
    I wanna
    Master your facial expressions
    And hold your feelings somewhere deep inside me
    So deep in the depths of me
    That only you and i could uncover it
    I wanna
    Leave you with memories of me
    Memories of us
    Wrapped around your mind
    And inmprinted in the chambers of your heart
    I want your passion for me to run through your veins
    Flowing so freely
    I want some strange form of tendons and ligaments
    To hold us together so firmly
    That we'll never fall apart
    In situations like these
    All i desire is to blessed withyour presence
    And i want you to feel me when i say
    I'm waiting for you patiently...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice flow of compassion.
     
  3. cursed heart

    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So full of passion!
    Lovely:blowkiss:
     
  4. Dlovely

    Dlovely Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love the flow. I can't wait to read more.Keep it going
     
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