Black Poetry : ...waiting to explode...

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  1. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So slow in movement…
    This pulse waiting to unfold
    towards natural growth
    in a situation stifling…
    A slow trickle spring shower
    soothing in the remembrance
    of the ice cold wet
    …of what could come
    impatient in the wait…
    Those drenching summer rains
    posed as an offering from the Gods
    A cleansing for bad deeds done
    an offering of fertility
    renewal…
    expansion…
    possibly a distraction from the after heat
    which surely comes…
    Maybe a reminder of the womb
    Maybe just rain
    a natural phenomenon
    Perhaps a karmic reaction
    simply in what comes around
    …comes around (?)
    Still lost in the stagnation
    action’s only approved of by the rock and the wall
    The rock seemingly unmovable
    physical strength useless in the push-off
    or so it seems…
    wasted dreams (?)
    impatience (?)
    Bridled passion encased in
    warped
    rubbed
    sand shells filed then fit into wooden frames
    Gut reaction slow anchoring of mind’s
    usual
    warp
    speed…
    Yearning for what may have
    …never existed
    or a fingerprint remembrance slowly faded by time
    Unmovable
    …mouth hanged
    a junkie’s head nod the only progression
    Hope still withstanding…
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!! u flip da script here wit dis one
    a very good read
    Quote===a junkie's head nod the only progression hope still
    withstanding....
    i like dis piece.
     
  3. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this piece is great...
    -7:spinstar:
     
  4. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you both!! much love!! :heart:
     
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    a world of lost dreams and might have beens...

    nicely done....

    K
     
  6. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kitana ~ thanks so much for checkin this out and your response! greatly appreciated!!
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lili

    I've read this before and wasn't able to respond but please believe that I loved it! Beginning to end.

    Reas
     
  8. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for coming back to it Reason!!:kiss:
     
  9. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this piece reminds me of maxwell's "for lovers only" check it out! lovely piece...lo'
     
  10. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey mkhaya lo'! thanks for checkin this!! and i will listen to that song. i love maxwell so that is a high compliment!! greatly apperciated!:D
     
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