Quiet Poetry Lounge : Waiting to~~~~~~Exhale.

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by angelicsage, Feb 23, 2005.

  1. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wonder if ...
    Every word that you just spoke, he's speaking to himself? ....
    I wonder if ...
    His every moment thoughts, runs deeper than your's? ....

    In life, there's usually a door...that swings both ways
    and what if ...
    Both hearts, minds and spirits are in sync with each other?
    Spirits
    cling forever...
    ex-hale

    I loved this piece to the core, yeah, you stormed on this one.​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    one thing for sure i feel evey line every note struck
    deep scribe as i inhale u exhale...........................
     
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    As much as my "Known Inherently" poem touched you, double that feeling, and you'll know how much I felt this....nuff said.
     
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    Angelicsage

    Nice...nice...nice...very nice.

    What if...he's mentally retarded...

    What if...he's illiterate.

    What if...he's spiritually blind.

    What if...he's none of these and is just taking his time.

    j/k :D

    :thanks: for sharing your concern of someone who's full of what-if's.

    :toast:
     
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    very nicely posed like this read....Angel
     
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    Very nice. Well written as always Angel!

    Only those turning know the truth. Leaving one wondering. Was I the cause of the root. Do I give encouragement to the action or deed? Did I help it happen, did I increase the speed? Leaving deep questions, one on top of another. It is hard I know to figure the deeds of another.

    Secrets are tucked, I like how you came. Back pocket, unsaid its a silent refrain. The silence is louder than a word one exclaims. Words are better spoken. Silence rattles the brain.

    Yes Eagles need freedom, wings must be allowed to spread. But those wings should strong. Open and inviting. If one feather is out of place the eagle can't glide with grace. Spiriling downward falling from space. Let the eagle fly, but his wings he has to clean. Letting his love ones, family and friends see him sing. The song isn't awys pretty. The one you like. if it is real truth, take it keep up in flight. What good is a show, when you have no support. Stangers can fill the audience but they vanish thru doors. All gone when the curtain comes down.

    Waiting to exhale means your waiting in vain. No success. For a chance to ask questions to know how one feels. Very lovely flow, it poses some deep thought. Give him the questions you thought. Now exhale.
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Queen, you are so insightful...and so on point!

    This is true...
    Usually, whatever we are feeling
    the other person feels too.../
    I've since found this to be true but sometimes...
    our love...is arrogant, thinking that no one else
    could possibly feel what we feel or give love
    at the level that we do...but this is untrue...
    ...it's a two way street, indeed

    Thank you...and much, much Love
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rich, Watz, Mba....Thank you my brother and sisters for checking out this piece...
    This was a less strategic, softer flow...thought I'd put it up after
    a friend said they loved it because it gave the
    feeling of being inside the "very" thought process of the author...
    Thanks for feeling me on that...

    Much love to each of you...
    Sage
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...stop clownin :nono:

    :spin: seriously, thanks for the love on this piece...
    taking your time in love is always a good strategy...
    good point...

    Thanks,
    Sage
     
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