Black Poetry : Waiting to Exhale...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Dec 5, 2004.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A gift unopened
    a dream not obtained
    a story in it's final chapter,
    yet who done it, yet unnamed
    A question left unanswered
    a wish not yet granted
    a syllable of the word given
    only to find its been recanted
    A scene of the movie played
    a hint of mystery is fine at first
    but a sip can no longer sustain
    a soul that's dying of thirst
    Nor can a morsel be adequate
    when a feast is being prepared
    this is not quite what one expected
    when the other said they cared
    I've held my breath for so long
    I was totally unaware
    of when I ran out of air
    As I sit here wondering about the
    happily ever after portion of this tale
    I look to you for resuscitation
    breathlessly waiting to exhale
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    breathe sista breathe
    inhale now exhale
    of this deep tale .......

    surely it will all come to light.
    da flow is tyte
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ya think? Even spring chickens can only hold their breath but for so long, and I ain't no spring chicken. More like an autumn hen. Anywho, thank you for the kind words Rich.
     
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    yeah but once exhale u find out ya not even a hen more like a strong Rooster
    most welcome
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Breathe again Watz, you take my air ~
     
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    The art of "Breathing" is a task..in itself, <............ and this contains to all walks of life. We "in-hale, we ex-hale" ...until mastered.
    tight piece and craftfully penned.
    ~Installation of life ...is important~
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rich, I suppose I am, when it comes down to it, thanks again.
    Awww, thank you 1poet, your pen is still smokin.
    Queent....the wisdom you pen, sister, is appreciated. Can't put life on hold, I know sis, thank you for your response.
     
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    Ahhhhhhh.....story of my freakin life, sister girl. Thanks for telling it so beautifully. :welldone:
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And thank you gempis, for letting me know you felt I expressed it well. smh Perhaps we should all cyberly sing "Keep Your Head to the Sky"....:)
     
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    "a hint of mystery is fine at first
    but a sip can no longer sustain
    a soul that's dying of thirst"

    word...i know this feeling very well...tyte joint on da real....
    one love
    khasm
     
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