Black Poetry : Waiting on Someday

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  1. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Frozen in time…

    for a moment or two

    We wait on the day,

    that abstract

    S~O~M~E~D~A~Y

    that lover's dreams

    will cease to {not} exist

    and forever personalize our

    waiting for just a while

    as we seek

    our heart's softest worth

    Sooner or later, the remnants

    of the day passively cascades

    into night where we

    peacefully,

    and with

    strongest composure
    of

    yearning,

    interact on a level that

    can and will connect our bond

    as we

    wait

    on that elusive

    S~O~M~E~D~A~Y

    {Yet to come} reflections

    of you dance like a beating

    heart on my tongue as I

    speak of you with love

    of mind

    in

    present
    &
    future

    tense…

    One day, any day,

    comforts me while

    I linger in love's passion…

    growing…

    maturing…

    bonding…

    Waiting on that perfect

    S~O~M~E~D~A~Y

    that steals away cares

    and kisses kindred souls

    here
    &
    now

    ©GQINC2K2​
     
  2. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you won't have to wait much longer with this piece.
    this is what i call true poetry.

    peace be
    jh.
     
  3. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GeeQue.


    EXCELLENTAY!!... dats spanish for excellent! :D

    serious-ly... wonderful-ly done! (dats RT)

    :heart:
    Elayne.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    GQ

    da wait is ova sho nuff i'm in line
    to get mines after u coz i've been waitting too long!
    tyght flow!:D
     
  5. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GQ

    Oh boi!! You worked this piece all the way out!! Very creative GQ... I think it's absolutely beautiful!

    Thank you for layin' it out there!!

    N2 --Always :heart:
     
  6. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes, this is a very well written, beautiful piece, dear poet. but you must know, that all of your pieces are very enjoyable to read. i must tell you, that i am really lovin' the flow of this piece, as well. continue to scribe, as i continue to watch in awe.
     
  7. Desert Storm

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    Still Wating ... For dat special day! Thanks for the read GQ Desert Storm
     
  8. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ms GA,

    This is very beautiful. The storyline touches the heart and causes one to "chew" on each line, rather than just read it.
    Thanks for sharing dis wit me.

    Joyce
     
  9. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks fam....

    Appreciate the read!!!

    :peace:
    GQ

    P.S. Joyce, it's GQ not GA.... :laugh:
     
  10. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oops!

    You sho is right. You are such a gentleman...not a mam.
    I gotta be mo careful.:D

    Just da same. I sho do like dis heah poem of yoin'. :)
     
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