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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Phenomenon, May 24, 2008.

  1. Phenomenon

    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The trees look especially happy today
    And the wind plays a familiar song
    The birds whistle love in their heartbeats
    And I tasted the sun's sweet smile when I kissed it
    But who is celebrating this?
    These monuments of peace go unnoticed
    As we turn our heads to more interesting things
    Like war and bloodshed
    Mama, please I just want to rest my head
    On a ground that hasn't been fought for
    Listen to sounds that didn't involve
    Screaming in the night or torture in the day
    Now that's what we celebrate...entertainment for the ego
    Sideshows of corporate and blue collar men claiming victory
    Condoning history where we have stolen, killed and plagarized
    As the Earth soaks up crimson,
    Heaven soaks up victims and
    Now we're stuck in the middle with the leftovers
    Bodies of children to cry over
    Mothers of millions who've died over...nothing
    I kill you, you kill me
    Tends to be the popular solution
    Hatred for the color of another's skin
    Slits the throat of the next generation
    We wait for the end times but for some
    Everyday is Armageddon
    Differences in religion
    Can crucify an entire continent
    Reminiscent to bad relationships like
    Romans and Christians
    The poor and politicans
    We slaughter cultures and ethnicities
    To get glorified recognition
    Take a look at the history books
    And see how there is no promise of a better future
    We explored and tore through lands
    Stripped nature from it's virtue
    Took tribes by the hand
    And told them, "we won't hurt you"
    If I want your territory
    I'll intrude into your country without a condom
    Force myself to be your husband
    And beat you so good until Freedom is a contradiction
    Because living freely is expensive
    Explosives caused men to live without appendages
    Because they fight for the priveleges
    That we take for granted everyday
    I just want to lay my head in peace
    Not hear the noise of revolutions, civil wars and genocides
    Universal rage that stores memories in my mind like
    Complex designs of
    Vietnam, World Wars, and scars on colored skins
    European tyranny, communistic reality
    And the boogeyman of dictatorship hides in my closet
    Fireworks go off in deserts that are not for celebrations
    Grenades are nightlights used for those dark situations
    Weapons of mass destruction flow in the human bloodstream
    For our nature lives a dream to cause nightmares of death
    So if you take a deep breath
    You can smell the ageless abortions of shores like Africa
    Where lives are always ripped too early from their motherland
    Dirty hands of the third world reach out to clouded skies
    But their cries are ignored by our clouded vision
    Soon the seven seas will emerge into eight
    Because all of their tears will have to go somewhere
    Winning only comes after millions have suffered and died
    It comes after selfish needs and greedy desires
    Stormy weather and human-made bonfires
    Bloody faces and disastrous places
    Wounds, weapons, and young boys sent to heaven
    Winning comes after everyone loses something
    So to me, that's not a victory at all
    Peace makes the trees look especially happy today
    Love makes the wind play that familiar song
    Truth makes the birds whistle that tune from their heartbeats
    And happiness makes the sun's smile taste so sweet
    If we take a minute to pause and listen
    We will hear what we really need to celebrate
    Proof of victory is right in our face
    When we realize how God is still great

    Copyright 2008
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So much I love about this piece. Where to begin? I like the way you began and ended this piece, with the peace that we often take for granted. You painted the colors of war so brightly, so we could see the pain. The pace of this piece, and the way you placed your rhymes, just added to it's intensity. You're quite a talented scribe.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    outstanding scribe of a war that brings in peace and warmth
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    YESSSS!!!!!!!! Oh YES!!!!!!
    WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN!!!!!!
    Phenomenon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    I just want to lay my head in peace as well
    Once we all desire that, maybe it will come
    GOD has been very good to us
    Are we the only ones that seek
    Are we the Only ones that seek
    his Peace?
    on this earth
    Heaven on earth
    I know that saying
    But people nowadays
    Don't even like praying:(
    I want it All back
    No more W-A-R
    Study This Nomore

    Flow On
    Truth all in it bro
    BLESS
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    us the greatness is still there

    as supported by your last line

    i really liked this part

    you said a mouthful and some

    i appreciate the depth and passion

    texas soldier

    peace