Black Poetry : visual vomit

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by verse, Jan 9, 2004.

  1. verse

    verse Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    visual vomit
    aka i spit it like i see it
    aint nothin abstract here
    aint nothin but fact here
    receive, react and share
    if i see blue then i will tell you about blue
    and if i see you then i'm gonna tell you about you
    your real colors revealed so it has to be true
    dont take that wrong because what i see could be beautiful
    we get straight to the heart of the matter
    granted i might choose words carefully but dont confuse that with idle chatter
    no beating around the bush
    the limits of the dictionary i push
    use dialect, colloquialism - whatever form of semantics
    to convey that i swallowed your bull
    now watch as i regurgitate to your face your childish antics
    i cant stand it
    just like most cant stand to hear it true
    visual vomit....coming soon to a hater near you!
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well said poet i hear ya
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight! honest, i gotta love that. great work
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    :new: Flava....
    new concept
    I'm feeling it
    keep it flowin...
     
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    well, remind me not to ask a question unless i want a very direct answer, but i can relate to the place from where you scribe. as usual, i see the talent in your writing verse. peace.
     
  7. verse

    verse Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for all the comments. the original version was a lot more vulgar
    but i toned it down a bit. didnt know if it worked the same
    but i guess it does.
     
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    rahstagal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    seems like there were hidden messages behind this, its real thats what I like.., nicely put
    praise
     
  9. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yo I must say...

    this is the tytest sh*t Ive ever read. I like ur confidence and ur steelo. ima always look out for ur work...
     
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    use dialect, colloquialism - whatever form of semantics
    to convey that i swallowed your bull
    now watch as i regurgitate to your face your childish antics
    i cant stand it
    just like most cant stand to hear it true
    visual vomit....coming soon to a hater near you!


    ^^^wow ...that was fresh....can I have your autograph?
     
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