Black Poetry : Virginity's Sorrow

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  1. Blue

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    ::Virginity’s Sorrow::

    I wake up from my nightmare in a cold sweat
    Breathing hard
    Looking confused
    As I sit up in complete darkness
    My thoughts become tainted
    My mind plagued by the thought of your first love making love to you
    Wait a minute…scratch that
    You making love to him

    I can’t get these thoughts out of my head
    The way he’s holding you
    Your moan
    Your thighs open
    All I see is moving silhouettes
    Lights off, because you nervous
    Feeling a bit insecure, exposing your naked body to another for the first time
    The future first love stands in awe and licks his lips
    Sex-starved, finally getting what he worked so hard for
    The dinners
    The quality-time
    The phone conversations…all paying off
    Now, he finally gets a taste of those thick thighs, he dreamed of so many nights before
    He finally gets to caress your breasts
    You lay there scared and wanting his “love”
    Armed and ready…lust consumed your lover’s body
    As he swam deep into your soul
    Stroke by stroke
    Move by move
    Breath after breath
    Stress and love released through the art of sensation
    And when it’s all over…
    You were both left “satisfied”
    Or at least he was
    You?
    Well, I don’t think you were so sure
    Yeah, you enjoyed the moment
    But now, you were feeling the aftermath
    Questions and emotions nagged at you with no success
    Because, you experienced “love”
    So, the two of you continued this ritual over and over again, until it became routine

    To you, you were giving him your heart
    You trusted him with it
    But to him, you’re were just another girl
    Leaving you used and abused
    Then again…
    It could be the Ideal Love Theory all over again
    I can only imagine the feeling
    But, I don’t want to imagine
    Yet, I still do
    It hurts me, too
    I lose sleep over the thought
    It makes me sick to my stomach
    That he broke your heart and took Virginity with him
    You will never see her again
    Won’t be able to give her a second chance to experience someone else
    Someone more deserving
    This man broke your heart into pieces, and scattered them across them the floor
    Leaving me to play clean up
    Now, I’m caught up in the emotional aftermath
    Playing the friend, lover, AND heart-mender
    What an undertaking…

    Then, the nightmare gets worse
    I had to witness the terrible end of a supposed everlasting love
    You didn’t even see it coming
    Day by day, stroke by stroke
    Your first love was killing you softly, but you couldn’t even feel the wounds
    Unaware that you wasn’t the only one receiving his “love”

    When you found out -----you died
    You died because all your interpretations of love have been proven false
    Of the real love you gave him
    You barely received a third in return
    So now, you’re alone once again
    Alone to mend your broken heart
    Family and friends offered to help
    But, you just wanna be alone
    Alone from the world

    And I sit here laying in complete darkness
    Wanting to hold you in my arms
    To protect you from harm
    But, I can’t
    Your eyes can’t see that I’m different
    Not yet, anyway
    But, when they can
    I’ll be here waiting….
     
  2. poeticdelight

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    i remember listening to this

    on your website in spoken word

    we have a spoken word forum as well

    maaaan :lol: blue, sherykah, and the rest of ya'll
    spoken word artists are about to make me go and
    invest in a microphone from bestbuy :x: :D

    nice work :toast:

    pd

    hey ladies i just remembered we're supposed to be
    having a battle of the sexes in the forum right i think
    this bruh just dropped a bomb over our heads lmao

    peace :lol:

    Ah dammmmmn! :)
     
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    awww

    that was beautiful.

    d
     
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    very nice vibe ...
     
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    beautiful.........

    lots of quotable lines

    keep it up

    this was hot

    never read u before

    hope to see more
     
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    **** this piece waqs beautiful. Infused with so much emotion and passion. Feeling this deeply.
     
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    Thanks so much. I appreciate the feedback. This site is full of talent.

    I see poeticdelight took the time out to check out my website. Thanks. I'm really trying to be one of the best poetry sites based in Atlanta.
     
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    very tight poem.......i was feelin it.......keep on writin........much love :)
     
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    Blue...are u me?....omg...
    Im gonna start crying now b/c i read this...that girl was soo "someone I know"
     
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