Black Poetry : View of Self

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by chaos, Nov 20, 2003.

  1. chaos

    chaos Member MEMBER

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    Hope you enjoy! :rolling:

    her name is called
    she walks on stage
    stands behind the mic
    looks at the crowd
    they are waiting
    she clears her throat
    adjusts her mic
    nods her head
    softly
    they play...
    drums subtle and precise
    cymbals sharp
    guitar, raw
    sax....the epitome of sexiness
    and then she sings
    she sings
    sweet bitterness
    mellow insanity
    and when she holds notes
    it seems
    her lungs hold air for eternity
    her words are simple
    no need for wordplay
    they still can't
    comprehend it
    and then she yells
    she yells
    it's not heard
    cymbals drowning her
    drums playing
    too intricately
    guitar giving jimi riffs
    sax weeping, whining
    crying now
    she drops the mic
    walks off
    crowd begins to listen
    and the band plays...
    still​
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey love, in Destee's Room we hear you loud and clear.

    Sing your song!
     
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    nice read...i enjoyed it..
    flow on :angel1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    enjoyed every line dis was tyte scribing here poet !
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Good work.. nice picture.
     
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    there are times I've felt as if I we're on a stage performing...
    my voice being drowned by elements that should compliment
    yet they inhibit my message...interrupt my flow
    yes the stage of life is much like this flow

    love the imagery...and creative verbiage!
     
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    AfroBoricuaRoni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight piece!
     
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    THIS WAS VERY NICE....I CAN ACTUALLY SEE IT.
     
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    thank you everyone for your positive comments. They are so appreciated! :D
     
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    Welcome :wave: to the family
    ahhh this is a nice drop
    the vision is there
    scribe on
    wonderful
    Peace
     
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