Black Poetry : Victory is not mine

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  1. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is for Ja.......


    No..
    victory is not mine
    not this time
    Romantic poems won't fix this
    Im just following a slow a%^ rhyme
    Dragging my feet in the sand
    You rejected all my affections
    So Rejected
    Im affected
    By my tears and yet I dont yet understand
    I thought you were my man!
    You became my heart
    ....yet i forgot
    It WAS my fault
    I f&*ked up
    By allowing another
    One of the fellow black brothers
    a Spawn of the Devils making
    Let him control my body
    Swim into my soul
    My legs recieved him whole....
    Now you won't forgive me
    I already knew though
    B/c you cussed and called me a hoe
    Told me to grab my s(#t and go
    So now I'm crying again
    My eyes are familar
    With The same feeling that still lingers
    My depression gets lower and lower
    My steps are getting slower and slower...
    F**k it I will still look in the mirror proud
    When Im around my friends Il act crazy and wild
    Knowing that the child
    I once was
    I still long to be...
    No.....
    Victory is not mine
    Not this time
    Not this year or century
    Because I threw it away for a piece of d&ck
    A 7 inch stick
    I think about it and...
    I get sick
    I wish i never like Carl Thomas
    I have little to no more pride
    I still love myself.....
    I just forgot the reason why
    ****....
    victory is not mine......



    *Ja I still :heart: you n I'm sorry
     
  2. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa...

    my best advice is to learn and move on.

    nfinite,,
     
  3. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I got the feeling that maybe next time, I'll leave some things OUT of the forum :heart: yall though regardless
     
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    cypher Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey we all make mistakes specially when we get caught up in emotions...love will find a way though...dont stop loving you and dont stop blessing us with the beautiful expressions of your heart....idecidedistillluvyou:heart: :heart: :wave: :wave: :grouphug: :grouphug:
     
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    Very vivid...I feel you, but constructively...this could be an even greater poem...Sometimes less, more powerful words can express a lifetime of pain and heartache or whatever it is your communicating and draw a reader directly into your soul.

    Trust the reader to hear your heart...
     
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    we all do dumb ish
    if i had a dollar
    for each time in the past i needed a collar
    i wouldn't be workin now
    and eventhough this situation makes you feel fowl
    lifes filled with up and downs like the dow
    jones
    and eventhough this love jones
    may be dead like skull and bones
    you always have the chance to atone
    if not ja
    then some otha brah
    cause life lessons learned can burn
    everyone gets their turn
    i've felt the fiery flames
    dosed with flammable rains
    learn from your pains
    cause you gotta maintain

    i feel your angst sis...it will be alright
    peace
    khasm
     
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    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you conveyed this well!
    Sounds like you are living and learning
    growth is always a good thing
    even if the 'only' good thing
    at the time, it leads to better things.
    Peace to ya!
     
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    Don't censor yourself!

    Don't censor yourself this is an open forum.
    If they don't understand just simply ignore em!
    Then gather your word ammunition and floor em!
    Your experiences are the tools of your craft and
    poetry wouldn't be poetry if they were only for a laugh.
    Some speak of pain and some speak of gain...
    but most of all , most of all they are release for the Brain!
    So speak your mind and your heart and let your spirit
    play a part. Don't worry about being judged...
    Cause we have all made mistakes...and some of us just
    don't know how to express it...YOU DO!
    THE POWER IS IN THE WORDS !

    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!
     
  9. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you evrybody for your comments I greatly appricate them!!!!!!!!!!!!! Mz B:thanks: so much :heart:
    khas n sky. Yall always cheer me up. I may not tell you, but you do
    chyper>istillluvyou2:grouphug:

    j'hiah thank you fot the advice
     
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    if it was,nt for the mistakes, how would we ever learn? Tyte scribe! So float that head to the sky! The victory may not be yours this time but the next time around it will!
     
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