Poetry Critiques : "Victim of yo hustle"

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by sweettee29, Jun 18, 2006.

  1. sweettee29

    sweettee29 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for reading while it was posted
     
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    Alright now, I see all that hustlin' and bustlin' had ya cussin.
    Real flow...flow real:yo:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    wow...that is a real crafty write...had me hooked for the surprise ending....a great, witty write, sweetee...liked how you phrased that one.......

    just watch the language next time.....lol


    welcome to destee....we all got love for ya.
     
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    sweettee29 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i really thank you for your honest criticism and i will go to the links you have provided for me i do honestly apologize for the words i will clean it up next time i am just trying to get a point across about a delima i see going on with our black men and it really makes me angry cause it is such a waste thankyou $$rich$$
     
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    thanks abstract i really appreciate the compliment promise to clean it up next time much love for all of you too from sweettee
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    im with you on those sentiments....we get too lost in fast money, fast cars and women.....and end up with fast judgements placed on us.

    great point.
     
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    sweettee29 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    APPRECIATE THE WORDS ABSTRACT MUCH LOVE
     
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