Black Poetry : Vibin

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Poetic_Soul_23, Jul 17, 2004.

  1. Poetic_Soul_23

    Poetic_Soul_23 Member MEMBER

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    Excuse me, Sista, but you caught my eye as I walked on by.
    Can I sit here....or is this seat taken?
    I was debating and debating on whether I could stop waiting and come over to you.
    Because, I checked your style and for a while I said to myself, "She has to be taken!"
    Not because of your words or your curves or the natural beauty that show....when you glow.
    But because you hold you head up high and in your eyes I see .....Pride!
    Something they couldn't take away when they broke your heart. Your confidence shows and it flows from your head to the tips of your toes. I just want to know....will you?
    Will you let another man...take your hand... and show you that love not only makes you cry tears of sorrow and pain, but also....of Joy.
    If the answer is "Yes", than let me order you some coffee or tea and you sip while you see me be me. We can compare scars and tell stories that are......sad.
    But lets rejoice too because what has hurt us before led you to me and me to...you!
    How true!
    You see I have been broken down by something that looks, smells and sounds...like love.
    But I will continue to try, until I die to find the love of my life and make her my wife......and adore her....Forever!
    Oh look at the time. The sun no longer shines. It's getting late, I got to skate.
    I'll pay the bill and leave the tip while you take your last sip but promise we can meet here tomorrow.
    I want to look in your eyes and I want us to vibe so we can get to know US better.
    I can tell by you smile that the answer is "Yes". Good!
    Well, until then, you take care my friend and keep me in your mind. You? Well, you will be in my dreams.
    Peace!​
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece made me smile. Just seems so laid back and honest, a conversation that could happen, and should happen. I enjoyed the vibe here. Welcome to destee!
     
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    Welcome Poetic_Soul_23...
    I am so happy you made it
    relax and enjoy yourself now..
    and dont forget about chat now
    www.destee.com/chat
    we be looking for you
    Peace
    Angel
     
  4. Poetic_Soul_23

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    Thank you and I look foward to reading you word and feeling your vibin and making you my...friend. Peace
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this made my soul smile...this is what every sista truly wants to hear
     
  6. Poetic_Soul_23

    Poetic_Soul_23 Member MEMBER

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    First of all, Let me say thank you for introducing me to something new. Thank you for helping me with my first post. I own it to you and I think I'll value our new friendship for many, many years to come. True Inner Peace to you!
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi and welcome to no other than "Home"...
    I like the way you stuck your foot in the door..wonderful and refreshing piece, but don't leave us hanging...we'll be waiting for the outcome of it.
    thanks for sharing this part of you.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the new family of love u found
    welcome from above as i bless you some love
    Tyte scribe it flowed so well as u get the feel here
    happy you join to share . WELCOME !!!!!

    do hope you consider or deside on a membership here
    take full advantage of features & benefits destee's offer
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    http://www.destee.com/forums/showthread.php?t=26882

    Welcome again poeticly poet !
     
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    Welcome Home Brother Poetic_soul_23!

    Loved your piece and will
    be looking for more!

    I loved how this
    went down!

    Keep bringing 'em!!!!!!!!
     
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    greggy Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes indeed this one was a very nice way to present the flow as a "conversation". I like your style Poetic, this was a very nice flow!
     
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