Poetry Critiques : Venting

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by FloReal916, Apr 20, 2005.

  1. FloReal916

    FloReal916 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wrote this piece because this chicken @ the poetry spot was tryna be all in my dudes face tryna persue, when she knew we were working on becoming an item! So I had to flash..poet style, stay tuned for part two!



    (Sing) I’m yo girl- you’re my girl- we are girls
    Don’t you know that I love you?
    Sike!!!!
    As a matter of fact lets address the issue of stepping on toes
    An opportunity to put you in your place I suppose
    You act like you didn’t know that me and ole boy was talking
    And when you seen he didn’t pay you no attention your emotions should have got to walkin’
    If I was the ghetto type you’d be outlined in chalk
    And all that salt you tried to throw in my game
    Did nothing but add credibility to my name
    Flo- real…got it…when you see us together at the spot
    All that rumor- spreading needs to stop
    Lets be real…I bet you’d like to know how my shoes feel
    Wish you had the talent to appeal to any audience
    You wish you could get up right now and represent
    (sing) I bet you think this piece is about you…
    True- and you’ll never know how good he feels but I do
    All caught up over phone calls
    Most of your voicemails not returned at all
    You even sent the informant by my house
    And for a friendly game of cat and mouse I played the game…but obviously
    (Sing) You don’t know my name…
    SO let me remind you…(sing) Tell me what’s my name? …Flo- Real
    Say it so many times until its etched in stone
    I’m not just trying to get under your skin but in your bones
    cause stepping on toes is behavior I don’t condone
    For practice you might consider writing a get back poem
    Just to brush up on your style
    Cause that imagination of yours that got you thinking you a poet that goes wild- naw it goes stupid
    I probably need to put this piece on a CD for you and loop it
    Probably in the club writing notes on pieces of a napkin
    And if you really was all that- then... why you ain’t got em
    Simply because you ain’t me, and I wouldn’t want to be you
    And if you get the nerve to respond, we can step outside and see WHAT IT DO!!!!

    To be continued......
     
  2. AHMOSE

    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GET Back! Home girl.

    Thanks for sharing
     
  3. FloReal916

    FloReal916 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She don't won't da pain Godsoulja!!! :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done i like how it was done
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Flo-Real, for real...


    Flo-Real, ('nuff said)
    :pie:
     
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