Poetry Critiques : utpoia; the nightmare we aspire to.

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  1. carsonh

    carsonh Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Utopia; the nightmare we aspire to



    We dream of it
    and hope for it.
    They speak of it,
    from pulpit
    and from podium
    and they make us aspire to it.

    Great men have philosophized about it
    and their philosophy is passed and studied
    from age to age,
    the interpretation never the same,
    but the ideal is unchanged

    Plato, Marx, Garvey, Césaire, King, Hitler, Gandhi, Machiavelli.
    In some way one ideal,
    all different interpretations of it,
    all with different means to achieve it
    and all different views of it.

    But what is “it”?
    “It” is an ideal of excellence,
    “It” is perfection,
    No,
    “It” is perfection’s living form,
    “It” is, what is Perfection.

    It is Utopia.

    The place where people are not black, white, yellow or brown,
    but just people.
    The place where universal unity is not a hippie’s dream
    or human rights speech
    but is something not even thought of,
    just done,
    like breathing.

    It is that place where there is no rich or poor
    Just happy people
    Existing complimentary to each other,
    Like day to night.

    no governed nor government
    no ruled nor ruler
    no defendant or plaintiff
    no judge
    no jury.
    These are not needed,
    What for?
    This is paradise,
    this is perfection,
    Utopia.

    But this is only one opinion of Utopia
    and this is the problem
    and because of this problem
    “it” can not exist.

    Our human nature,
    longs for it,
    as much as it would not let it be.

    Garvey’s Utopia was not Hitler’s Utopia.
    Garvey’s Utopia was not even Dr. King’s Utopia.
    For my Utopia is not yours;
    the Utopia of one person
    is the living hell of another.

    Do you see the troubles of perfection?
    Have you seen the chaos, pain and suffering left in the wake of those marching to Utopia?
    Have you heard the cries and pleas or the valiant but vain chants of the pursuers of perfection?
    These are the troubles of perfection.

    I have seen and heard
    and you have too,
    just look around you,
    we are living in the troubles of perfection.

    The pursuit of Utopia,
    this ideal of excellence,
    the chase. . .
    is painful and cruel
    it is inhumane.

    But we can not abandon the ideal.
    What would we live for?
    All we do,
    all we work for,
    all we believe
    is an attempt to be the best
    and the best is perfect
    and Utopia is perfect.

    A vicious circle?
    A cruel destiny?

    We all strive for perfection
    but each with different perfections
    this causes conflict and pain
    but we still strive for perfection;
    it is human nature.

    A vicious circle
    and a vicious torment,
    our nature seeks our best
    but drags us through the worst
    and we are powerless.

    Utopia; the prize of struggle
    the ideal un-realized
    the nightmare we aspire to.
     
  2. MenNefer

    MenNefer Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Existencial Unrest

    Good read.....:sand:
     
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    carsonh Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you for the comment,
    Ideals do drive us as human beings to do some serious stuff to ourselves and others to achieve them. Sad reality.
     
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    So many quotables in this, but this stanza brought it all together for me:
    "But this is only one opinion of Utopia
    and this is the problem
    and because of this problem
    “it” can not exist."

    What we often put ourselves through is insane. Another great write.
     
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    well done nice joint no changes needed
     
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