Black Poetry : Ustalay

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  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    we ustalay
    side by side
    each night
    holding each other

    comforting

    the love that
    we had for each other
    ustalay
    between he and I

    closerthanclose

    I usta be stubborn
    and demanding
    but his kisses
    always could make
    me behave

    those chocolate
    eyes paralyzed
    my mind and
    and spread a
    smile across
    the universe

    I can't explain
    what happend
    or when the change
    even occured

    he ustalay
    next to me

    side by side

    Pre Debs
    and post Dawns

    now he's gone

    and I lay in
    bed

    alone





    2002 N2urSoul
     
  2. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    are u intentionally tryin

    to upset me this morning?? LOL just kidding...

    love this and your style !
     
  3. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this one. a nice twist.
    stay in...
    b.e.z.

    hw
     
  4. Queen_of_Spades

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    dig the twist

    This definitely had a feel of reminiscence and longing...I also dug the way you flowed certain words together; added to the overall effect.
     
  5. wildflower7

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    this is classic... lovely as ever N2urSoul. :spinstar:
     
  6. Legacy21

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    I have reminisced like this. It's like one minute you are submerged in an overwhelming moment of blissful passion, and the next it dissapates like clouds between your fingers. Feeling the emotion in this piece. Singing: "It was all a memory in my life......"
     
  7. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    N2..

    this is a sad reflection of a love lost...I can almost see your fingers reaching out to caress the empty space where he ustalay..

    K
     
  8. Twofish

    Twofish Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah...madd original
    diggz that!

    1:heart:
     
  9. elayne.

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    n2.


    well... well... well! it seems you've finally
    found your way back home!! :)
    it mustabeen ( :wink: ) all the APB's i put
    out on your scribes!! (LOL) but seriously,
    it's wonderful to read you once more...
    ...& to see that you still got madd tyght talent
    in that pen of yours!!

    itsallLove,
    elayne.
     
  10. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LiLi

    Thanks for the luv ... glad you enjoyed the read!

    n2