Quiet Poetry Lounge : use our heads

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Feb 29, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i sit here..quiet
    wondering why we are together/alone
    no sounds radiate and yet
    in the stillness i hear the air breat15{frustrated, not understanding
    what are the words that need be said
    to make you/me - us connect.

    the radiator burps as if some held in gas
    releasing
    the steam flows....
    little faces/icons smile and spew, blink
    and laugh, growl and toast
    technology hovers everywhere.


    Religion says obey...and so we do
    ...it can be easier than thinking
    Do as you are told, don't USE YOUR HEAD
    follow the rules, follow the directions.....
    do we progress..move to another level
    spiritually, intellectually, lovingly
    if we don't USE OUR HEADS?

    I'm rambling, i know
    wanting desperately for us to grow
    to move to a place where we will see
    we are not free to be
    until we do more than use ourselves
    in obediance

    Think about it...
    for me , for us, for we
     
  2. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    something happened when i posted this thread...i went back and saw
    that the way i wrote it and what is posted are different..
    it should read in the middle of lst stanze
    " I feel the air breathing
    vulnerable, frustrated not understanding..."\

    and then it continues as is...
    sorry about that
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What I got from this is sometimes we just have to do like we feel, not foolishly, but whole heartedly. As far as the error, maybe you can go back and edit it somehow...doesn't really take away from the message, though which I liked. :)
     
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    i dig what you saying
    its been a min since you laid a scribe
    flow on my sista...
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Deepy i felt it and
    it was the gate openning
    of the mental mind sprayin
    to canvas the emotions
    we all enter this faze yet do
    as we feel on the note of goodness
    tyte scribing a message heard
     
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    Word em up, girl, I am diggin on your message.
     
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    wow...I knew without a shadow of a doubt...that you were a very deep person. The stories that the heart can hold...and gently ...exhale.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    queen...i breathe...letting in and out...thank you for your zest for life
    your understanding of the exhale...
    gempis...glad you liked...and always appreciate your support
    $$rich$$ --you not only Use Your Head but you also use your heart..thanks
    mzblkangel...thanks, always a little afraid to write things down in here..one always wants to please ones family..and i know, sometimes, my rhythms and my "zone" is in some diffrent place...so i really thank you for encouragement..
    watzinaname...glad you saw what you needed to see...for me it's about we as a people, before we just jump into something..before we just follow
    think...sometimes in church people are trained to obey and fear and so they give up one of their own important functions ...the ability to think..cause if you think, question..you have power and the ability to grow and help not only yourself..but we as a people/nation...I went off a little...hope it didn't soound like preaching...but you shared so i returned it...thanks for that i so appreciated it...
    I APPRECIATE ALL OF YOU IN HELPING ME IN MY CONTINUANCE..
     
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    Actually, if you read what I wrote again deepy, it's not that far from what you said that it meant. I don't need to see anything in poetry, if that's what you meant, fine. It is not disagreeing, you just explained the deeper meaning, thanks for taking the time.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    watzinaname...i never felt you didn't get it...check out what i said to you..
    "you shared....so I shared and i hope it didn't sound like preaching..and i thanked you for sharing"
    Never felt you had to be shown anything...au contraire...it is just nice
    when opportunities come to discuss...and that was all i felt was going on..
    if it seemed as if i offended...didn't mean to and i apologize if so..
    I truly accept what people say...i put no assumptions on it...it makes life easier for m..
    thanks for sharing your feelings....i like that
     
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