Black Poetry : Us

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by THEONE, Apr 26, 2004.

  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello, Hello, is anybody home
    Does your heart feel me trembling or hear my moans
    My moans of pain, trembling of fear
    Feeling that occur as you appear
    Thinking on what we had
    Or what surely should have been
    Why does these things happen as we begin
    Begin to conversate, or even look at each other
    My heart runs and hides, like a child scorned by his mother
    My emotions run deep, so deep
    Whats a man to do
    Body shakes, shivers, goes limp, over the thought of you
    Is this really happening to me
    Could it be true
    Im involved in a war, between me and you
    My heart... Your mind.......
    A battle of a different kind
    Best believe you'll win the battle
    But Ill win the war
    My heart won't let me rest, until I push through your door
    My goal is to capture as you have me
    Let you get a taste of a yearning so deep
    Take heed to what I say
    Know that this is true
    As I conquer these fears I will engulf you
    Mind, body, and soul I won't quit
    Im coming fair lady, keep the light lit
    Lit in your mind so Ill know true
    Even my queen has a vision of us too!
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    keep knocking surely the door of heart will open
    this was awesome tyte THEONE flow on
     
  3. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm feeling this piece deep......flow on :wink:
     
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    turtle1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a realy nice flow!!!!
    loving it!!!!!
    keep it coming please!!! :read:
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Have to be made of stone not to feel this, this was so descriptively emotive.
     
  6. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is really touching and lovely. and I agree with $$RICH$$, don't ever give up.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love conquers all...watch the door...for it will surely open.
    wonderful scribe...thanks for sharing.
     
  8. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes

    this was a deep floE...I was feelin this for sure...nice drop THEONE :spinstar: Nita :heart:
     
  9. PurpleMoons

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    Nice flowing!
    I like, I like,
    I loved it!
    WoW! Very strong
    convictions felt
    in this vibe!