Black Poetry : Us Combining

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by lilcherry76, Sep 1, 2004.

  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    touch the inner depths,
    of my soul.
    take your love,
    and pour it inside.
    stir it slowly,
    until it is well mixed.
    blended just right,
    leaving me with a delightful taste on my lips.
    and a delightful smile,
    on your own.

    now take my hand,
    and walk the years with me.
    let us set our footprints,
    in the ground of times.
    so that others may see,
    which way love leads.
    let us leave no tree uncarved,
    no bird without a son.
    for all nature will sing,
    when they behold the love God has bestowed upon us.

    and fret yourself not,
    with the woes of tomorrow.
    for it is not promised--nor deemed to come,
    let us live now!
    let us harmonize our togetherness,
    in the grayest clouds.
    and when it rains--take a straw,
    and let us drink happiness by the cup.
    gently taking in,
    the taste of it's bliss.

    then lie upon me the sweetest,
    of sweets.
    thy kiss of power,
    shooting me with shocks so alive.
    be my cover during the cold nights,
    as well as the cool spring seasons.
    take me,
    and let us intertwine.
    let us braid so tightly,
    that even whips can't break us.

    and lastly,
    my dear beloved.
    finalize us,
    by lying with me.
    but only after,
    the ring has settled.
    for i shame not God,
    for he has given me so much.
    and i pray he taketh not away,
    what time we have for ourselves.

    just lay with me,
    a little while.
    and feel me,
    as i feel you.
    let us leave no emotion,
    untouched................
     
  2. Lloyd

    Lloyd Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When readin' it,i see that u r someone really special!Waitin' marriage 4 havin' sex isn't so common!Wish u the best
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    unto a worthy heart and motion love dis was very well pose'd
    i feel u on it too combine the common needs and move into a
    pool of foreverness
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Saving the sensual love until a promise of eternity is taken. This was beautiful.
     
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    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    when I finished reading this I felt like...aahhh

    the quoted stanza I felt was not only cleverly crafted but the sentiment in the metaphor was extremely strong...
    :toast: :toast: :toast: bravo on an excellent piece of writing...
     
  6. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lloyd thank you, it's hard to come by nowadays, because common is common, and tradition is "thought" common, thanks for the read.............

    RICH what can i say..................thank you? that's not enough justice, but i give it to you anyways, you know i have more to say.

    watzinaname thank you, glad you saw it like i did............one love

    and finally 7thpoet.thank you so very much, you made me smile big time for what you replied, i didn't even think of it that much way, until i re-read it....thanks for opening my eyes.................one love


    and again i say to all of you...............................1 :heart:
     
  7. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    posed well..very strong piece enjoyed the read