Black Poetry : UpWordly Mobile ( pity party - come in)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Hypnotize, May 2, 2002.

  1. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I see him everywhere i go, except in the bathroom.

    That upwardly mobile, early 20 yr. old ..

    Cell phones ring during class, he and his cohorts
    race for their bags - me, i just sit there and not notice it all.


    I've never been the perfectly clean cut,
    polished tooth white smile ,
    " breakfast is the perfect way to start the day "
    athletic , fuel injected kind of guy.

    My smile is somewhat grayish.
    My style is somewhat archaic.

    I wish i could go to the mall whenever fashion
    or even need dictates.

    Even this poem is an exercise in meager attempts
    at what should be greatness.

    I want the upwardly mobile girl,
    she has her little palm pilot tucked in her
    pant pocket under the cuff of her sweater ---
    Together, we speak of internships , trips to China,
    Education and how wonderous the future will
    certainly be.

    It unfolds w/ no wrinkles.

    Not even any residue of the
    ashy , check - to - check , bus token ,
    futile lifestyle of this , my hour... of discontent.


    Is that I never have what I want
    or
    never want what I have ?


    Is that my words tell the story
    or
    my story is written by my words ?

    Cuz i've spoken love, peace and happiness.
    I've spoken prosperity,blessings and increase.
    I've spoken better complexion, life over existence,
    and cheerful countenances under recently unwrapped
    morning suns.

    My words have been UP .

    Up before Dawn.
    Up above the stress and transgression ( sins of the parents )
    Up and over mountains of insecure, cold heights.

    And the only falling is my failing.
    The only falling is my failing ...
    the ONLY falling is my failing to live up to ... whatever is up there.


    I've been HERE.

    I want to be THERE.
     
  2. Derrick Jay

    Derrick Jay Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lifting my head up to this bit of insightful essence, nice work...nice!

    One,
    Derrick Jay
     
  3. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you = I'm not sure if it's insight.

    Just not being able to deal with
    not having what my life is centered around.

    But thinking, if i have life - what else could
    it be centered around ? - but yet, not ever wanting to settle.
     
  4. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just beautiful! Lil' brotha Hyp ~ this is so "uncovering".... so "exposing" ... so ... so ... well, ****, it's just the **** BOMB!

    :)

    Lovedid it!

    N2
     
  5. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I truly feel this piece, to aspire to be what you see can be your destiny is sometimes a life long journey.
     
  6. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    This is SUCH a good piece!!!!!!!!! I loved the way you took me into your mind and made me FEEL you!

    Thank you


    alyce
     
  7. eternalprince

    eternalprince Active Member MEMBER

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    digging deeply into the why and wherefores. we, or those of our ilk, can't fail. We can be delayed a little, but failure is not an option. Because we simply CANNOT see life any other way. we have to be the great ones. All we need do to get there is to always move foward complete one task and move to the other. we can't fail so what we do has to produce results. Please believe.
     
  8. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm far from my twenties but i felt you just the same, been there, done that, grabbed that brass ring, driven to the big wedding, the home ownership, the 2.5 kids the picket fence, the trips abroad...don't matter...sometimes I still wish I had married that poet...the artist, the one that still believed in love. You'll be aiight.
     
  9. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am honored

    I concur w/ Eternal Prince ( of my ilk ) - I know
    we should get there - we WILL GET THERE .

    I just wrote this cuz i've always wanted to be THERE, but
    i still find myself HERE.

    I appreciate the love everyone.

    Reading your replies and your poetry helps alot.

    Redlady , thank you - .
     
  10. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a classic pieace from a classic artist :toast:

    your writing style is sik...

    nfinite
    jh.
     
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