Black Poetry : Untitled

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  1. MsInterpret

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    Jealous rants and raves
    Smashing all the things I gave
    Tearing me up inside
    While you abuse me on the outside
    I've strive to be the best
    Giving you my all
    Even though I have nothing left
    but heartache and a bruises
    whose the one who really loses
    You or me?
    I guess we'll both have to see
    Another one's loss
    is another ones gain
    even another ones pain
     
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    so real , so true and well felt
     
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    the abrupt undertone of this poem
    ands a sense of finality to the poem
    ...as if its the last time the character
    tends to go through this.

    Great poem ma'am!
     
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