Black Poetry : Untitled

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  1. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I dont have a title for this yet but check it out anyway. I'll take any suggestions on a title. Im blowing the dust off my pen and pad so bear with me.


    A chance encounter unexpected and unplanned
    A moment in time when eyes met and hearts connected
    In that brief experience was planted the seed for a
    Relationship that would grow wild and free.
    Blossom and bloom it would into a rich deep
    Forrest of emotions and feelings so full and
    Fertile that new feeling and emotions took root
    Over time.
    Pruning and weeding of this forrest only caused
    Chaos and emotional turmoil so it was let
    To go and grow and flourish.
    At the root of this forrest is one who wants to be loved
    And one who is willing to love.
    The sun shines brightly all the good times and feelings
    The rain showers fully all the sadness and disappointment
    But such is the circle of life and love.
    So we watch as it grows on and on. ​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    for da moment of time as the beauty of souls blossom as love blooms in da mist
    of a forest it would continue to grow on and on .....hummmm!!!

    1. New Love arise

    2. Flourish love

    as i hold it close in mind i will be back to add more once i lock down on it to think...

    this piece was warm sweet and cascading calling for the blossom of a bloom to rise
     
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    Very nice piece!

    I don't have a title to suggest right now.

    But, I often think of music with poetry and this one brought to mind "Wildflower" by Sylark and New Birth.

    However, it's a dual blossoming. It is spring-time. So I thought of budding flowers and soft rains.

    "..let the rain fall down upon her
    She's a free and gentle flower,
    growing wild"
     
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    Thank you Cherry. And your right music and poetry seem to entertwine.
    $$R$$ I like those titles but I wait to see what else you come up with.
     
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    sister im horrible with titles lollll
    but this piece left me refreshed like even though there had been a storm... things would be okay :)
    straight forward and hopeful :read:
    im interested to see what you settle on :read:
     
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    I enjoyed this descriptive piece, how love blooms, what occurs when the garden is allowed to blossom freely. I'm not great on title suggestion either, I know sometimes I just go on how I felt when the piece was penned. I definitely felt a sense of freedom in this write.
     
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    Or I just love how love grows. And I loveded this right here
     
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    triniti424
    Thank you for the feedback. I know I will come up with a title soon.
    watzinaname
    Yeah normally I have a title but this time I just couldnt think of one. I am
    glad you enjoyed it.
    asimplepoet
    MMM I like that. I am glad you were feeling me on this one.
     
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    Freedom garden of love
    or
    Gentle blossom love blooms
    or
    sometime it's just better left as is .....UNTITLED 101
     
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    I believe I am in agreeance with you $$R$$. I dont think I can
    give it a title It will just be Untitled for now. It seems so much more pure that way.
     
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