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  1. jus_dat_nice

    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Excessive emotions etched into the heart of a pessimist
    Until bombarded with the light of optimism in the form of YOU
    Then what was once percieved by me as a dream in the convoluted scheme of things
    Materialized into something great enough to transcend reality
    And we immersed ourselves in it
    Each thought painted a fantastic image of your beauty
    If only I could experience it I wouldn't mind living in my head
    Where when you hold me in your arms time has to pause to catch its breath
    Left breathless from love's kiss
    As we were held in the balance
    Awaiting the result while eternity and perpetuity fought toh old our hearts
    We dismiss their limitations and claimed time as ours
    Since this love has been growing sicne before pharoahs ruled the world
    And statues of gold adorned with countless rubies wouldn't measure to the beauty
    I love you just because you make me smile
    You're able to loosen the grip which with comtempt held my heart
    and help triumph enough to rise above it all
    Stod beside me as we faced the crooked-nosed goblins with empty grins and larceny in their hearts
    Without weapons in hand we defeated them
    Now we kick back on the throne and promise always
    And holding back tears because I miss you
    Even if I do hold you in my heart
    And you live on with me in my mind
    Countless symbols bring you to mind as if I could forget
    I love you​
     
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    WoW!

    An eternal love etched in the heart, mind, and soul of it's host. Yeah! You won't be forgetting that love. Atleast, not in this life time.

    Heartfelt! Thats whats up!

    :heart:
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    i ain't mad at cha

    feeling special about someone that makes you feel special

    in the purist sense is that so wrong

    between the sexes?

    appreciate the write poet

    it was real

    very real
     
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    Such penetrating feelings expressed so eloquently, the words were almost piercing they were so full of love. It's as though...you sculpted this piece. Wow...
     
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    so beautiful a deep love etched within da heart means everlasting ...love this to death!
     
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    THANK YOU!!!

    thanks for the love $$RICH$$
    i sure do hope it is everylasting :)

    thanks watz
    i try my best and i'm glad that you enjoyed it like you did

    thanks So'ja
    there shouldnt be anything wrong with it all

    thank you purplemoons
    theres now way i'm forgetting him :)

    Much love to everyone for reading!!!
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    AHhhhh... :look:
    a poetess in love with love
    its lovely :)
    I find it refreshing in this distraught world to still hear of lovers in love with their love :)
    write on poetess
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aint it though??? lol
    thanks for the love
     
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    THAT FIJI WATER FLOW
    PURE
     
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    loving from afar...

    BEAUTIFULLY CRAFTED peace. the emotional turmoil we go through when we're not with the one we love is painful...so, we try to hold onto the memory of our love...until we meet again.

    P a R t I n G in such great S o R r O w
     
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