Black Poetry : UNTITLED

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  1. AgAbus

    AgAbus Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the same dankness that pervaded
    his landscape, wrecks havoc
    near mine.
    the power of transition
    leaves the bitter after-image
    of me bathing in the
    Euphrates striving to wash
    the stench of
    bleakness and
    habitual
    shortcomings from my pores.
    the same
    dankness that
    litters his
    complexities and
    provides me with the searing
    revelation that it was
    never me he loved…but
    he loved my security…
    loved my passion
    for living…he
    was a
    leech.
    he
    leeched
    and lecher’d
    the
    broken shards
    of displaced ideologies and
    age-worn poignancies that
    made for dreary coffee-side
    stories of we and
    what should have been.
    u
    have left me
    with the smell
    of shattered
    splinters littering
    the floors of my soul…the
    vaults of my heart
    have grown cold
    and dusty without the
    heat of care…the heat of something…anything…
    u
    have succeeded where
    I thought you’d never…
    u have
    proved to me…that you can
    intensely LIKE someone but
    you’ve never
    been capable of
    loving
    anyone…


    …how sad…




    ©2008/AgAbus



     
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    Well. Well. Another insightful piece. the emotion of it all jumps right off the page. AS Always I love how your words paint such a vivid image
     
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    Hey there AgAbus,
    What is really going on up in this poetry thread this morning????
    1st gsalt now you....
    I am ordering you all to get our of my head....lol
    This is a awesome piece here the depth of the feelings I know so well.


    u
    have succeeded where
    I thought you’d never…
    u have
    proved to me…that you can
    intensely LIKE someone but
    you’ve never
    been capable of
    loving
    anyone…


    This just sums it all up.


    Much luv to u my fellow homeboy:)
     
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    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You never cease to amaze me with how your heart pours out such soul. I loved every line and you always end it with a...WOOOOOW!
     
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    AgAbus Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ASimplePoet...I love you and appreciate the beauty of who you are. Thank you for you.


    4Everluv...thank you utterly for your insight and for feeling me. Theres been a lot of pieces and such that seemed to have been birthed right in my mind written by other poets. I thank you love.


    PHENOM...yo it has been a minute bruh...but I HAVE NOT forgotten you and I love you MORE today than I did before. Thank YOU for your beauty and support! We're blessed and favored of our Daddy!
     
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    The detail of your writing, is piercing. And I could feel how a heart could be pierced by this revelation. whew...
     
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    AgAbus Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sister Watz...thank you honey.
     
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