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  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I haven't finished it yet...bare with me :)



    The remains burned slowly
    Until I blew them out
    Brushed the abrasions to the side
    Revealing recollections of melancholy dreams
    Inscribed my pain in his veins
    Pumping every tear and iniquity committed against me
    Walking away in the midst of my papers is
    Your name, surrounded by infamous heartbreaks and exclamation points
    Ending in nobility
    I dot my “I’s” , bold the “love” and underline “you”
    It is not easy to escape this escapade
    Not too soon before I hate you again
    And somehow it amuses me
    This hide-and-seek type
    Can’t give up until I get it right, game we play
    Outlining reasons to call
    Running to my pages is your name, as I write this letter
    Stating “Dear you know who,
    The rumor is in fact true,
    For some unknown reason I tolerate the remote things you tend to do
    Can even pull out the actions to say ‘I love you’
    In case you forget who this being is, it is truth speaking loud and clear to you
    I once said ‘my pen no longer carries the strength to speak of you’
    Well my pen is empty in need of refilling
    That’s why I called you
    My pages were beginning to shrink
    That’s why I called you
    Underneath this synthetic type
    Inhales and writes, a real type
    A real; genuine; an
    Authentic lady
    Can’t fathom the idea of
    Understanding through vulnerability
    Connecting pages
    Refilling empty hearts
    Be my words
    And we could be like my words
    Eloquent, intense, genuine, legendary
    Forever”

    I double space and sign this letter,
    “Inevitably yours, Jackie”
    Address it to
    Somebody
    ‘Cause that’s who you are to me
    ....To be continued....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely written to that someone........feeling it
     
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    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This poetic story is so beautiful just like the author.

    Thanks for the journey through your thoughts.

    D.S.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Endearing and eloquent at the same time, how beautiful.
     
  5. BrandNewMe

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    This poem was just so sweet.
    I am looking forward to reading more.
    I hope you will name your poem
    Because you have placed so much
    feeling into this poem.
    Flowing the Art


    Peace and More
    BrandNewMe
     
  6. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey Poetic:
    I felt every word of this piece. Very nice
    work sista as usual.
     
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    Can’t fathom the idea of
    Understanding through vulnerability
    Connecting pages
    Refilling empty hearts
    ^^^^
    my fav part

    this was a deep scribe your emotions speak from beginning to end
    8/10
     
  8. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love u guys :)

    i am currently working on this poem, i'm trying to finish it, but it's kinda hard....and to Tantrum- thanks....that's my fav line too :)
     
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