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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by mzpoetic8705, Nov 5, 2006.

  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey people :) I started on this one, but I couldn't find the words to finish it off...let me know what u think :)

    thanks

    Now that I have you here
    There are a few things I must tell you
    Like the way
    You allow me to feel
    And like the way you enable me to speak
    Like the way you place my pen next to your ear
    Whispering things like
    Read me
    Script me
    Love me
    And yet my words begin to slur when I see you
    And my mind is weak
    Phones keep ringing
    In my ear
    Saying things like, poet
    Writer
    Inspirer
    Long winded words
    Just afraid to give in
    So I play silly games
    Like fondling my purse
    Or constantly smiling
    When I see you
    Or when I hear you
    Or even when I just think of you
    Still holding back
    Cause last time u never called back
    And I refuse to allow that to happen again
    Friends don’t let friends drive drunk
    Well lovers don’t allow lovers to fall
    When they can’t...

    --MzPoetic8705
     
  2. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sounds finished to me... Great flow
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I must say, this scribe gave a crisp description of raw feelings. Don't take a person there, just to let them flounder. Wonderful write, and if I didn't have to spread some more kudos around....you would have gotten rep points from me on this one poet.
     
  4. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep heavy and on point this piece was felt within
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think it is finished it was felt and i enjoyed the read
     
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