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  1. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The walls are closing in
    Claustrophobic and afraid
    I can’t breathe in here
    I hear him calling after me
    But I’m running blindly
    Tears obstructing my view
    Overload of thoughts
    Cluttering my brain
    I hear him calling me
    Trying to reassure me
    I sprint through traffic
    Rain falling heavily around me
    Piercing my skin but
    I can’t really feel it
    Numb to it all and
    Wishing things were different
    Robotically find my phone
    I try to call Mama
    But you answer the phone
    I didn’t mean to call you
    Who are you anyway?
    Just some guy I date
    From time to time
    We’re nothing special
    Funny that I should call you
    “Hello,” I manage to choke out
    “I didn’t mean to disturb you.”
    I know you have various meetings
    I don’t know why I called
    You say, “Glad to hear your voice.”
    “It’s been a while since we’ve talked”
    We fall into small talk
    I’m afraid to tell the truth
    The rain is really picking up now
    Thunder and lightening crashes loudly
    Instantly you recognize a difference
    Something is not quite right
    Persistent in your questions
    “What’s wrong? Are you okay?”
    A muffled sob leaves my lips
    “Where are you? Can you drive?”
    I tell you, “I’m off of 10th, downtown.”
    You’ll be here in 20 mins
    How you’re off 20 and over 40
    Mins away and in this traffic
    Yet it took you 40 mins
    We hear the crash from
    A wreak like two streets over
    Shocks us into moving to dry land
    Drying me off while asking and
    Pleading me to tell you what’s wrong
    I can hear myself talking but
    The calmness of my voice seems
    Foreign and cold and not my own
    My Great-Grandmama died last year
    My Grandmother is in remission
    They found a lump—think it may be
    Cancer
    The floodgates open and I can’t
    Differentiate between your tears and mine
    I’m 2 and too young to die.
    I repeatedly say, “I love you.”
    You speak for the first time in
    It seems forever, “Baby, I always have.”
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    another deep scribe tyte joint !
     
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    The way this was posed, made me feel I just stepped into the middle of someone's life. And the ending, to hear those words, "Baby I always have...' such a comfort and a relief at the same time. Intriguing write.
     
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    I agree with watz, nice write softly.
     
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    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks again rich, watz, and 4ever... i wanted you to step into that life... so i guess i did my job...

    thank you again poets...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    all up in it too......most welcome sis flo head on i'z love it.
     
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