Black Poetry : untitled

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  1. shyberry379

    shyberry379 Member MEMBER

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    yall this my first poem please tell me what u think:confused:


    Everyday and everynight
    all i seem to do is think of you
    even after we just had an arguement
    I wish those words you said werent true
    you put me down in so many ways
    from callin me a lier to a cheater
    "baby I promise I didn't," is what I would say
    but only God knows my different ways
    huh, I used to think I was so slick
    everynight comin home happy cuz i gotta lil d*ck
    I would say "baby they dont compare to you"
    then u said b**ch please we through
    Im like ***** please I can always get anotha
    then u said, they can never compare to this brotha
    thats always been there for you kno matter what
    hold you at night after passionate love makin
    cook for you, cater to your needs
    I loved you
    but look how you done did me
    I stormed out the room
    mad and confused
    and from that day on
    all I could do is think of you
    how you treated me so right
    with out even thinkin twice
    I picked up the phone
    to see if you were home
    I was surprised to hear another females voice
    so i thought to myself
    O OK so this is your choice
    I quickly said sorry wrong number
    and hung up the phone
    that lil ***** is dead wrong
    havin another b**ch answer his phone
    I knew i should've just left that alone
    I said to myself,
    from this day on, I will never do my man wrong
    thats what got me sittin here alone
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When the shoe is on the other foot, it's a very painful, uncomfortable fit. I liked the way you posed this tale of a lesson learned the hard way. Welcome to Destee, hope you enjoy yourself here.
     
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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the new home you found
    welcome from above as i bless this some love

    Tyte felt drop , sometime the hard way is the only way
    to asure self this not the deal or what's real ya feel me .

    continue to flow , express and confess give love as love is given
    welcome to the house ya family ...........
     
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    all i can say is wow girl it makes you mad when your in that type situation makes you want to go ike on him. don't do that cause there plenty of men in this world who wants to show you the way to your heart. you know what they say the tongue makes up for what he short in. if thats the case don't be a fool to that. nice write
     
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    too new to go without review uppin it back !
     
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