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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I saw a girl the other day.
    She seemed so lost inside.
    She had tears streaming down
    her now reddend face,
    and the frown she wore
    wouldn't go away.
    When you looked in her eyes you
    saw pain and hate.
    I wanted to help her but what could i do?
    I stepped a step closer
    and she seemed to too.
    Then I stopped for
    a moment to look at her face.
    She seemed so familiar but no one
    i could place.
    I reached out my hands to give
    her a hug, it was then
    that i remembered just who she was.
    This wasn't any girl,
    but a mirror
    instead.
     
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    BioRhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I don't know why your wrote this or your state of mind when you did so.....

    but all that I can say is that the poem can be taken personally or as a generalization to us all....

    It is horrible to lose one's self.... and much more horrible to have never known who you are. That is why the pain and emotion is so deeply felt here...

    A very inspiring write......
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes sorrow can consume us to the point where we can barely recognize ourselves. You definitely captured the feeling of sadness in your flow poet.
     
  4. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    im glad ya'll liked it and understood what i was going thru but after writing this poem i figured out that there's sum things in this world that u can't figure out and i really don't know where this poem came from but i know im tryin to find out who i realli am!!!
     
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