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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by plainrhythm, Nov 11, 2004.

  1. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    don't have a title for this, feel free to give suggestions.

    tormenting eyes around that
    rhythmless spine leave me,
    utterly and completly weak;
    you are that boom and bip that
    the music notes just can't seem to
    fit. that's why you're mine.

    we have grown into each other's mortal
    and have loved to love, as the words we speak
    are entirely real, true and blessed.
    my eternal valentine with many faces,
    don't despair, that's why you're mine.

    your aura is the vary one that
    soothes the raging waters
    into peaceful springs without
    even a blink of those icy, coolaid
    eyes. That's why you're mine.

    the mountains look low in the summer
    because they bow down to you,
    my brother, your sympathetic brown
    skin leaves the message of: you are not
    alone, so they listen, and so did i.
    that's why i, am still yours.

    could i be feeling weak because of his
    overpowering stature, nah... i'm weak
    because his piercing outline leaves
    me melting in the very depths of my
    soul.

    you play mind games with your many
    faces, your many smiles with a different
    meaning for each. i read you like a book,
    brother and you read me like a single
    page... that's why we belong, and always
    will, together.
     
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    Another great peice, Plain
    Keep droppin Sis
     
  3. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks ONE.
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hi: :hi: :hi: :hi: :x: no thnk you for a great read
     
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    I love that stanza...
    that just did it for me...
    Nice flow...
    Sage
     
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    very nice and smooth flow...enjoyed the read
     
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    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you very much for reading!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    just awesome seem like da title is within it self
    love the flow here
     
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    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you $$RICH$$, thank you sooo much!!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome plain.......................continue flowing lovin ya vibe u scribe here.
     
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