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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by NDeep, Sep 21, 2004.

  1. NDeep

    NDeep Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can you hear me now?
    Can you show me how
    To be heard among the crowd?
    Should I be loud?
    Or maybe I'll change my message
    I'll erase this word and replace it
    Change my mind, and
    Unmake the band
    And cut my rubber band
    Release myself from this Poetic struggle....

    But I can't.
    I must rumble
    With new thoughts when they tumble
    Straighten them out
    And translate them into word of mouf
    That's my job. They gon' hear me
    I can't flip the message
    It must remain complete
    I must erase the blank spots off this sheet
    I must remain unique
    I am NDeep
    You hear me?
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, you are heard, in your own way, in your own style. I can appreciate this drop.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    word up, hearin ya loud and clear. nice drop
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feelin ya here dis was said loudly and on point
     
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    **** i gotta feel you on this one....
     
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