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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ~!!!This is a poem based on my friend who is now a cutter becuz her man broke up with her becuz he ain't love her, so i wrote it from her point of view!!!~


    I cut my arms
    I made them bleed
    did anything and everything
    you could eva need

    I begged on my knees
    I didnt even cry :cry:
    When u blackend my soul,
    I wished u would die :uzi:

    I screamed in silence
    and bloodied my lips
    to ease the pain
    From u at my hips

    I killed my soul
    ignored my heart
    to **** with u
    and break u apart

    your still my baby
    u always will be
    just please answer this....
    NOW do u love me? :angel1: :heart: :angel1:
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow loved the way you grabbed this piece, nice poem sista keep em coming
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

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    intense..but tight drop flow head on....
     
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    Wow :( so sad smh
    I would HATE to be the one in that position
    where ALL my love SELF included on anotha man smh
    cant do it
    speak for her sista
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sadly spoken well felt whewwwwwwwwwwww!
    express on
     
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    wow...You certainly put yourself in her point of view...I'm slowly dying for you, do you love me now? What ashame. You posed this on point, this got to me.....
     
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    he certainly deserve a holloween gift :driveby: ...with love.
     
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    this is very straightforward
    nice scribing poet
    keep the flow goin
     
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    I've seen this before...
    and it's so sad...
    the state that one
    must be in to feel
    that they can't
    live...*literally*
    if that person
    does not love them
    back...

    you dropped this
    with a lot of raw, in your face
    kinda reality...I like that!

    Nice work!
     
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