Black Poetry : Untitled

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  1. unfoolish1223

    unfoolish1223 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm not sure if being with
    you like this is wrong or
    right because I know you
    probably will never be completely
    mine...yet this is all I ever wanted
    from the first day I laid eyes
    on you...we were friends
    first and hopefully that will
    never change because I value
    our friendship and it means
    a lot to me, but even as
    just your friend I cared
    for you more than words
    can say...I wanted nothing
    more but to be with you in
    anyway I could and now
    that I got it here I'm all
    confused...I know its best
    if I just left you alone, but
    thats just so hard to do...
    just the touch of your hand
    upon mines means so much...
    I think about you all day
    everyday and I do want
    to be with you, but now
    its starting to hurt deep
    inside...I must say I think
    I love you and I don't
    know how to tell you...
    I'm scared of not having
    you or being around you...
    not being able to touch you
    or kiss you...
    I dont want this to hurt anymore
    I wish you could take my pain away...
    I wish you could help me make it through
    another day, but I need you here beside
    me as close as close can ever be...I
    need you to be a part of me...
    I need you to love me as I love you...
    I need you to see me as I see you...
    but the sad part is I don't want to
    love you...
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop lady, Im diggin this
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whewwwwwwwwww!! well felt scribe
    expressing self is da key
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Don't want to love because sometimes love hurts too much, I liked the way you posed this.
     
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    one_love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very moving

    I love the your style of writing, by letting the sentence run to the next with a differencet style of pausing. Very nice.
    One_Love
     
  6. unfoolish1223

    unfoolish1223 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks everyone for the love
     
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