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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SensualReality, Mar 27, 2004.

  1. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was afraid of what I was feeling
    Afraid of the love that had my mind spinning
    Afraid of the kisses that left my fingers trimbling
    Afraid of the eyes that watched me as I slept
    Afraid so afraid that I wept
    I was mesmorized by your twinkling eyes
    Mesmorized when you traced that sensitive line
    Mesmorized when you said I love you and gazed into my eyes
    Mesmorized by the scent of your car fresh pines
    Mesmorized so mesmorized you passed all my safety lines
    I was hurt when you lied and broke my heart
    Hurt when you said we must seperate be apart
    Hurt because I was fooled from the start
    Hurt when I was afraid
    Hurt when I was mesmorized
    Now I'm dying from all the pain inside.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte scribing
    be not afraid of love forth it's gentle warm and sweet
    like dis flow go head poet let it all out
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks

    i try my best writing is the best I express myself...
     
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    yes expressing self wit the pen the release what is held within
    i feel ya let it go flow on
     
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    Every time you love there's a chance it will be for a lifetime, and a chance it won't work out. And when it doesn't there's that ache, which you expressed here very well. Keep writing.
     
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    very deep
    feeling the emotion
    in your flow
    drop it
    flow it
    release it
    nice piece
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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