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  1. illwillthakid

    illwillthakid Member MEMBER

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    Her creative words gracefully grasp my attention
    Though her identity wasn't mentioned
    My mind still want to listen
    Her words were deep
    So deep that their meanings were embedded in my thoughts
    Affecting my soul
    my ears couldn't resist cause they were caught in the strong hold
    Her creative mentality
    took me out of my reality
    & put me in a world were prolific lyrics were the casualty
    As she spoke her words wrapped me in captivity
    And held me tight, taking away my ability
    Her vibes gave me a feeling I have never felt before
    & though these feelings were strangers to me
    these feelings I adored
    My heart soared
    As she became the point of my affection
    & this was more than a crush
    or an infatuation of lust
    it was more like obsession
    I felt as if I was hers
    like those words she enscribed on paper
    And I paid attention & spoke to her just to gather her favor
    She replied to me in poetry
    Which was a language I knew fluently
    Being the gifted artist I was acclaimed to be
    So, after her presentation
    I approached with no hesitation
    & after a conversation
    It was plan to see
    That the strange feeling was her insenuading
    how she wanted me
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This subjective piece is a good read.
     
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    two poets attracted within the air of written emotion...
    building passion within stanzas and
    syllables...there's nothing greater than
    being able to communicate in this way...
    nice flow poet!
     
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    I am in awe of your eloquence!

    You did a fantastic job. And you are so articulate.
    I don't remember 16 year olds being so wise...
    I am your most honored admirer....Keep up the
    flow!

    Blessings On Your House!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very very nicely done impressed
    happy u flowin so sweet ....keep up the scribe
     
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    hey ya flow was sweet...
    keep on flowin now..much love
    :angel1:
     
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    Universal feelings

    illwillthakid, Continue to pay close attention for it sounds like you got yourself a real keeper. Especially when her poetic words reach the depths of your soul and whatever course you walk just keep in mind she is there for a real reason, for the Almighty got a plan.
     
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