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  1. nadea

    nadea Active Member MEMBER

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    I stood before the heavens
    and I screamed at them
    and they screamed back
    "this isn't our fault, we've
    been tricked too."
    Once again I stand alone
    this time i'm holding
    princess cut. It was a lie.
    Why do people find it
    necessary to play with my heart
    to toss it back and forth
    only playing with mine
    Remember that music in the
    other room, you said you wanted
    it because it was the perfect
    verse over a tight beat
    when you really only wanted to listen
    to it and marvel over it
    The song you really want is
    some crappy Ashanti song.
    A day without life you said
    after Illicit intermissions
    After glowing the love you
    said we shared.
    In the midst of all that
    you were still believing in
    someone else's love
    I should've walked away then
    but I was all wrapped up in
    Todays thoughts of you.
    Somewhere in my naive mind
    I thought today could turn into
    tomorrow and tomorrow into forever.
    I wish I would have stayed O.P.P.
    but I was swayed by your whispers
    into eternity
    that, when given a chance to become
    screams, only became softer.

    I awoke to find that it was all a dream.
    you can only visit heavens gates in your dreams.

    Or rather it was a horrible life -mare
    that unlike a dream, I can never wake up from.
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very very nice poem...
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    VERY MENTAL PLAY
    TYTE AND FELT THE EMOTIONS FLOWING WITHIN
     
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    And I was so caught up in todays reality
    Or what I made it out to be
    That my naivite'
    Never allowed me to see things the way
    They really existed.
    Dayum, here I went being a fool again
    And in the middle of no where my heart was broken
    Because that's where being in a relationship with you got me
    And still I stayed, foolishly.
    Hoping that you would realize what you've got
    But you were too stuck on love you have not.
    And so you left me only to find that love has an ugly demeanor
    It hurts when you step on grass thats much less greener
    Than it was inside the fence you left from.
    And you stand awhile at the gate, but left love never comes.
    I am sorry that I thought there was ever a you and me.
    I cannot compete with a memory.
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nadea
    This is a very nice piece.

    I like this part especially.

    " After glowing the love you
    said we shared.
    In the midst of all that
    you were still believing in
    someone else's love "

    Stuck on someone, that isn't in your life.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice...
     
  7. nadea

    nadea Active Member MEMBER

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    Thank you guys so much for the replys.

    Eternal, Thank you for finishing my thoughts
    that I could not complete.
     
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    I didn't know you had posted this........ (unspoken emotion)
     
  9. nadea

    nadea Active Member MEMBER

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    Emotions left unspoken
    flood your soul with tears.

    Nothing but love Eternal Prince.
     
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